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Tank

Postby J.R. » Jul 19th, '11, 20:37

Original link, Here, its another rapping site I'm on.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread. ... l?t=443637

Simplistic, post some more shit later :y:


I’m like a gauntlet and I have to go through 3 rounds,
But I’m like a tank, you ain’t knocking this nigga down.
My rhymes can make you jump in the air and lose control,
You be screaming What the fuck when you catch my flow,
Til my tank shoots you down and makes you march steadily behind,
But when you hear this simplistic beat and melody, your mine.
It’s like an army base commander minus all the screaming,
If you think that you’re the best, keep on fucking dreaming,
I keep looking behind my back to make sure your scary face ain’t there.

Chorus:
I’m like a Tank!
And this chorus is a little undeserving,
Of these people I’ve been hurting,
All these wicked rhyme I been squirting,
You won’t take me, Fine but I’ll take you,
Time to take my spot this is overdue.

Obviously you wouldn’t accept me, And I guess I can forgive,
But when I come back and sentence you to death, don’t call me morbid,
All your rhymes are awful, they don’t make sense, and just horrid,
Go back to gaming, ain’t no fucking sense in being here,
If the sign says “No fags allowed,” Then why you do stay queer?
My flows are like a tank, they always shoot bolts of cannonballs,
I’m so blind I need to yell randomly like Ozzy, “Shannon CAll!”

Chorus:
I’m like a Tank!
And this chorus is a little undeserving,
Of these people I’ve been hurting,
All these wicked rhyme I been squirting,
You won’t take me, Fine but I’ll take you,
Time to take my spot this is overdue.
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Re: Tank~ Old Rap I made on another site

Postby J.R. » Jul 22nd, '11, 23:08

Would like some feed, Please. Aight thanks.
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Re: Tank

Postby Fa-Q » Jul 22nd, '11, 23:11

This had very good flow....I put like 50's voice behind it for some reason.....great drop, Shady, our collab's gonna be fire :smoking:
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Re: Tank

Postby J.R. » Jul 22nd, '11, 23:16

Fa-Q wrote:This had very good flow....I put like 50's voice behind it for some reason.....great drop, Shady, our collab's gonna be fire :smoking:



Thanks, and you know it :smoking:
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Re: Tank

Postby BigBoss » Jul 23rd, '11, 03:38

last line on verse 1 wasnt really needed but i like it :y:
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Re: Tank

Postby J.R. » Jul 23rd, '11, 03:39

SWEET_TOOTH wrote:last line on verse 1 wasnt really needed but i like it :y:

Thanks, I put that there as a reference to a popular joke on the other site, so, yup.
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Re: Tank

Postby Sam. » Jul 23rd, '11, 12:25

no link of feed :unsure:
any way inb4 cock lock
blehhh the piece was alright didnt really like it some bars didn't really together and like sweety said the last line was more of a filler or you should have used it as a bridge or some shit but w/e .

the 2nd verse was better tho i liked it but 3 line rhyming
Obviously you wouldn’t accept me, And I guess I can forgive,
But when I come back and sentence you to death, don’t call me morbid,
All your rhymes are awful, they don’t make sense, and just horrid,
:shakehead: tats nt gd man .
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