EyeQ - Battle Stance

[EyeQ200]

A quick peice thrown together, i obviously got DQ'd from the battle tourney so theres one or two battle lines in there that i decided to use, it's not much but i'd appreciate feed
Feed: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=125178

I'm back delivering orders from gods, spitting through my bars
Roll up the red carpet and start shooting for the stars
I dare anybody listening to jump on a track with me,
You'll get hit by my train of thoughts, jet black, you'll see
You become fans and fall in love with my flashes of brilliance,
if i succum, man loses all, void of hope till i dash the resilience,
My EyeQ's higher than Spyders blood pressure, I'm smashing,
Neon blue lights are flashing, me and you fighting, clashing.
Silence is SILVER bullets penetrating werewolves in sheeps clothing,
I'm the GOLDEN boy after i stangled King Midus (Keep holding!)
I run with the snakes at the back of the class and in opium dens
No need to duck down if my buck shots are flying over your heads
I'm cuttting off cliff faces and slating names in heirogliphics
Horrific how i position these missiles at no one in specific,
Dentists told me to grin and bear arms, so i got armed to the teeth,
All i wanted was peace, the breeze dies and i return as calm as a leaf.

[SG.]

Nice piece. This would have been a good battle rap had you actually posted it on time.

[EyeQ200]

Nice piece. This would have been a good battle rap had you actually posted it on time.

I was busy.

[SG.]

Nah, I believe you. Seriously though, great job.

[EyeQ200]

:shifty:

Nah, I believe you. Seriously though, great job.

Nah, the thing was Spyder and Ax had an arguement and then it looked like the tourney wasn't going to go ahead, i had finished working and was getting prepared to go back to school so i wasn't checking for it...
Thanks though

[Atone]

this was ok, i loved the last 2 lines, exept for the calm as a leaf part, that doesn't seem to make sence to me but i liked this