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Introducing, Fucked up Nutz. [Track 1 On LP]

Postby J.R. » Sep 14th, '11, 00:56

viewtopic.php?f=24&p=1755528#p1755528 - Feed.


[Intro]
So, So...I heard you think,
I heard you think...I'm weak..
I heard you think, Ima cave, give up and quit out?
Well, Stop running your mouth, or I'll knock you out.

[Chorus]
For all you faggots, Running your mouth,
I've had it, I'm coming to knock you out,
If you think I'm mad bitch, wait til you go down,
The fact that I'm savage, makes me come back around..


[Verse 1]
I'm a fucking Proud hoosier, Or I Claim to be,
Also A stuck in crowd loser,You people seem Gay to me
Shriek! A Scared sound, Fuck a Cougar, I'm Insane you see,
So when I stared down at defeat, It was pain that I seeped,
It's fame that I'll leap for, Cheap whores, Brain as lame as can be,
The ladder way to fame is a steep tour, Boredom, Rain making me sleep,
You making me weep, with all your cheap insults and tactics,
Your shaking your feet, Damn queefs, acting like insulted faggots.
Maybe to my peers I am a little Offensive,But I'm just Relentless,
My ego's a little Dented,That you thought you could achieve Vengance.
This is weird And you guys may not Get this part,
You might find life is like a game, Hit the start,
This is my real life Diss track, So homie just Kick back,
Fuck it, Go grab a Quick snack, While I go through and rip fags,
Dear Zac, You can have your nasty Slut back,
Hear that? I'm lucky I didn't Fuck that,
The bitch probably had a Disease or two,
Hear that hoe? I'm done Pleasing you,
Oh and while I'm at it fuck all but my loved ones,
Hope they don't die on me, No one else is above em'.

[Chorus]
For all you faggots, Running your mouth,
I've had it, I'm coming to knock you out,
If you think I'm mad bitch, wait til you go down,
The fact that I'm savage, makes me come back around..

[Verse 2]
Sorry for the mini rant, but I remember shit vividly,
I remember the time the bullies kept hitting me,
Took my shit, flipped my books,
Now everyone's throwing fits, Tryna rip my look,
Tryna take my style, Cause I fight back,
Karma don't get me in the ass, I'll bite back!
Oh yeah, and my Ex- Best friend, Let's Talk about her,
Her and her husband used Sex to amend, Causing a stir,
Cause she'd cry to me, telling me there shit and there problems'
Some days I'd die of agony, some days I'd be her sidekick AKA Robin.
And now I barely even know her, two years sure goes by fast,
Friendship is rare, For sure, Something you can't just buy back,
Sorry I Complain, But This is how I vent,
I play this Game, So here's my two cents!
Pretty depressing first song, gives you a taste of the album,
Second- guessing this? Wrong, Live my life a waste til the outcome.



[Chorus]
For all you faggots, Running your mouth,
I've had it, I'm coming to knock you out,
If you think I'm mad bitch, wait til you go down,
The fact that I'm savage, makes me come back around..
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Re: Introducing, Fucked up Nutz. [Track 1 On LP]

Postby Sam. » Sep 14th, '11, 13:47

Dope 1st single to start of the LP tbh.
I'm a fucking Proud hoosier, Or I Claim to be,
Also A stuck in crowd loser,You people seem Gay to me
Shriek! A Scared sound, Fuck a Cougar, I'm Insane you see,
So when I stared down at defeat, It was pain that I seeped,
It's fame that I'll leap for, Cheap whores, Brain as lame as can be,
The ladder way to fame is a steep tour, Boredom, Rain making me sleep,
You making me weep, with all your cheap insults and tactics,
Your shaking your feet, Damn queefs, acting like insulted faggots.
Maybe to my peers I am a little Offensive,But I'm just Relentless,
My ego's a little Dented,That you thought you could achieve Vengance.


That's some dope shit right there ,you went in real hard in this .The inner multis thing that you did was pretty awesome and was the highlight of the whole track .The title was justified in this lines .

As for the second verse you started where you left .I got this from this line .
Sorry for the mini rant, but I remember shit vividly,


This is really clever .
Pretty depressing first song, gives you a taste of the album,
Second- guessing this? Wrong, Live my life a waste til the outcome.
[Rollefsen] - SajN retired, bitch got old, unlike Sams "ladies".
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Re: Introducing, Fucked up Nutz. [Track 1 On LP]

Postby Words » Sep 14th, '11, 16:49

B.Nutz wrote:http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&p=1755528#p1755528 - Feed.
[Verse 2]
Sorry for the mini rant, but I remember shit vividly,
I remember the time the bullies kept hitting me,
Took my shit, flipped my books,
Now everyone's throwing fits, Tryna rip my look,
Tryna take my style, Cause I fight back,
Karma don't get me in the ass, I'll bite back!

Those lines really spoke to me, sounds like I've been through some similar shit. I love when I can relate life to a verse, or even a couple of lines like this. :)
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Re: Introducing, Fucked up Nutz. [Track 1 On LP]

Postby J.R. » Sep 14th, '11, 20:09

Two positive feeds. Thanks guys. :y:
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Re: Introducing, Fucked up Nutz. [Track 1 On LP]

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 14th, '11, 20:50

I really really enjoyed this. You went in hard, it sounded powerful...the multies were nice as fuck, you got that part down to be honest. When you record this, I can imagine it as being "powerful" like you should be attacking the mic. Good shit keep at it man :y:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Introducing, Fucked up Nutz. [Track 1 On LP]

Postby J.R. » Sep 14th, '11, 20:53

Thanks man! Really appreciate it! :y:
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Re: Introducing, Fucked up Nutz. [Track 1 On LP]

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 14th, '11, 22:32

Anytime man :b:
Mind feeding mine? I'd appreciate it viewtopic.php?f=24&t=125788
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Introducing, Fucked up Nutz. [Track 1 On LP]

Postby J.R. » Sep 15th, '11, 00:47

RainMan44 wrote:Anytime man :b:
Mind feeding mine? I'd appreciate it viewtopic.php?f=24&t=125788

Will do this week.

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Re: Introducing, Fucked up Nutz. [Track 1 On LP]

Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 16th, '11, 00:03

i like it overall, good way to begin it
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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