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Lights (Random throwaway verse..Tryna build momentum)

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Lights (Random throwaway verse..Tryna build momentum)

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 17th, '11, 09:42

Just trying to build momentum before writing for my album :smoking:

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Hopin' out the limousine, the women scream
The cameras flashin' so the rocks on my fingers gleam
The hatin' ass nig-gas scheme
They must've thought that life is as easy as it is in they dreams
Nonetheless we ignore them and hit the scene, spend a G
Only thing concernin' me is weed, liquor, cream
Never been the type to tend to a bitches needs
If you faggots can't tell by now, I'm sick indeed
Haters ain't threats, we got triggers, aimin' at 'em
I'm quite sorry you couldn't milk me for your payments, madam
And I must admit, it's a damn shame you haven't
Managed, to make me buy you the latest bag yet
'Cause I ain't liable to buy a hoe a Diet Coke
Bitch tries messin' with my dough, I go into fighter mode
Light a load...of green, sit back and fellate me, trick
You shady bitch, you money hungry hoes make me sick









First 6 bars influenced by Jay :smoking:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Lights (Random throwaway verse..Tryna build momentum)

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 18th, '11, 06:59

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"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Lights (Random throwaway verse..Tryna build momentum)

Postby Just Silver » Sep 18th, '11, 15:51

this piece was nice multis almost all the way through was very enjoyable I liked the line with the diet coke lol..

the only thing that I did not really like was the length but that was not really a big deal I have short pieces all of the time just wondering was this free versed
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Re: Lights (Random throwaway verse..Tryna build momentum)

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 19th, '11, 23:10

Just Silver wrote:this piece was nice multis almost all the way through was very enjoyable I liked the line with the diet coke lol..

the only thing that I did not really like was the length but that was not really a big deal I have short pieces all of the time just wondering was this free versed



thanks for the feed bro :y:

and yes, just writing a random verse. No bigger picture to it.
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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