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Idols (feat. Eminememy) [TRACK 6]

Postby SG. » Sep 18th, '11, 15:35

[Verse 1 - Eminememy]

I paid the steeping price to be still alive, you pissed baby?/
Pissed that slim shady has kept me living lately?/
Bitch still hates me but I'll keep listening to Eminem's music/
Slept on bricks, bet your sick of Eminem's words prick/
Force dicks to hear him where ever I go/
I you don't, I'll sever your throat, better like jokes/
Heather's on ropes, his insanity has rubbed on me/
Mugged a puppy, jee I'm mean, it's shoved to sea/
Love that freak, Eminem is my hero/
If you think he should die, your a signified zero/

[Verse 2 - Zabe]

All the other rappers idolise Em, Jay, Biggie and Nas
And I do too, but that's not who I'm gonna applaud
Name your favourite storytelling lyricist
If you're underground enough you'll say Sadistik
Well, what your favourite producer say?
"My name is Dre, and you forgot about me"
I had a fantasy that was beautiful, dark and twisted
A man who walked faster than Mr. Corpus Christi
So yeah, Yeezy, you are my idol
Jay and Em started me off but are they in their prime? Naw...
They need to recover and make Blueprints
Meanwhile you're rapping about phoenixes and bitches
I know you graduated but that you're still learning
As long as everyone knows I'm still yearning
For a life to prosper...
Kanye, I am your faithful watcher...

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Manîx - http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=125784&start=15

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Re: Idols (feat. Manîx) [TRACK 6]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 15:38

Nah man, this is Eminememy not Manîx haha. Dope verse :y:
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Re: Idols (feat. Manîx) [TRACK 6]

Postby SG. » Sep 18th, '11, 15:39

Alright, I'll change it.
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 15:46

Sorry, it's just I wan a different image for Manix, want him to seem like a better lyricist and definitely darker.
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby SG. » Sep 18th, '11, 18:32

Geno wrote:Short piece...should be longer or at least have a hook.

I think you guys clashed with your verses because the 1st verse praised Eminem and the 2nd verse said he wasn't in his prime. :laughing:

Overall it was okay. I think you guys need to challenge yourselves with your complexity. You seem to be holding onto a comfort zone in this piece.


Honestly, I considered adding more people, then thought that would be disrespectful to Manix after he tried hard with the verse. As for its quality:

Direct quote: "I don't really idolize anyone" - Eminememy

And I'm just shit.
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 18:59

Haha, yea Geno, this was actually a hard verse to me. I don't idolize anyone cause I don't believe in it. I respect and look up to individuals but never idolize. On my new LP I'm going to be breaking out of my concept box a lot though so look into that :y: Here is the first taste and this, "Idols", was the last track as Eminememy.

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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby Sam. » Sep 18th, '11, 19:25

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WTF man ? The hell is this ,looks like a throwaway verse .I didn't like this a bit,sorry .

Zabe
Yeah ! that's some clever shit right there ,you mentioned Kanye at last but I could make it who it was after reading few bars .Rhyming was a little week but even then I liked it .

Horrible Collab . :shakehead:
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby SG. » Sep 18th, '11, 19:35

I've been getting a few :shakehead: recently.
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 19:35

I understand how your feeling Sam, I did too. I couldn't think of anything but didn't want to let down Zabe, he definitely got me on this one. We have both done better imo

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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby Sam. » Sep 18th, '11, 19:40

Zabe wrote:I've been getting a few :shakehead: recently.

What ? I said i liked it .

Man1x wrote:I understand how your feeling Sam, I did too. I couldn't think of anything but didn't want to let down Zabe, he definitely got me on this one. We have both done better imo

Sam, feed?: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=126370

Then you should have asked for some time ,that's no excuse .Zabe is understanding dude and he would have obliged easily if you would have asked .

And I am already on that track . :y:
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 19:43

I know he is understanding but I had already extended the deadline to long, shoulda asked but I didn't want to seem like I wasn't going to do it or that I was ignoring him.
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby SG. » Sep 18th, '11, 19:44

Man1x wrote:I know he is understanding but I had already extended the deadline to long, shoulda asked but I didn't want to seem like I wasn't going to do it or that I was ignoring him.


Did I? Sunday was always the deadline.
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 19:57

No remember I asked for it to be Sunday cause of school work?
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby SG. » Sep 18th, '11, 20:04

Man1x wrote:No remember I asked for it to be Sunday cause of school work?

Sent: Mon Sep 12, 2011 8:28 pm
From: Zabe
To: Man1x

Maybe we should think about making that duo!

Just kidding, I was wondering if I could get another collab from you? 16 lines, the topic is about the person you idolise. The deadline's Sunday.
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Re: Idols (feat. Eminememy [Manîx]) [TRACK 6]

Postby Man1x » Sep 18th, '11, 20:09

Oops nevermind, haha. I thought askedfor that deadline. Might have got it confused with the b.nuts collab, smfh. I'm sorry, to make it up to you get a reserved spot for a collab on my lp, if that doesn't work I'll rewrite the verse but I doubt it'll be much better
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