The Apøs†le [Track Two - Infamous Lp]

[Man1x]

"The Apøs†le"



[Intro - Manîx]

A message to the children...

[Verse 1 - Manîx]

With a dark eclipse comes the apocalypse/
Eight drops of sin and a plague started this/
Fillin' crates and small crypts, there's a lot to fix/
When I drop into fits I flip chairs and fling a sock of bricks/
Hate this, bitch? Then I'll drape Greece in bottles of piss/
As I'm shaking the Acropolis, all while raping the land's populous/
I'm making an apocalypse, time's breaking, analog clocks skipped/
My mind's shaping a grey heart's abyss, I rhymed this leap of faith, sought a risk/
Lied, saying I hate wrongful sin, I'm going to break all your kin/
Time to go and pray for some bliss, your life is gonna pay for my gifts/
Ya'll tryin' to keep pace, Manîx won't slip, I'm the fucking Apostle/
The one framed as hostile, I'm summed as colossal/
Your child's funky role model!

Link of Feed: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=126659

[Man1x]

Like you said, obviously not finished.

Dope what you have so far though man. I liked the rhyme schemes and dark feel (also portrayed through your art)

Keep it up.

Do you think the flow is good or can you not feel it, cause I think I sacrificed flow for long multi rhymes

[Man1x]

It got a little long at the end and if you were flowing to a beat it would probably sound awkward or you'd have to rush it.

Other than that it's fine.

And I dunno why you highlighted your rhymes, I like being able to find them on my own.

Haha, sorry. What do you think is good reasonable multi length? 4-5?

[Mr.DGAF]

I think I said earlier that I thought that your new direction, with the name and all, was looking good for your writing. Well, with this peice, I stand by it. The vocabulary, topic, rhymes, all were just really good. The flow was iffy at times, but you said that you sacrificed it willingly, which is fine. Evantually you'll get to where those long multies flow perfectly through your peice.

But one of the nicest drops I've seen from you, can't wait to see the final version.

[Man1x]

Thanks bro, was it just the end that didn't flow well in your opinion, when I switched to my inverse rhymes? Cause I didn't see flow problems with the other 8 syllable rhymes (the ones in blue) I think that was cause I started them off and built up the momentum instead of switching it so fast like i did with the inverse

[Mr.DGAF]

Thanks bro, was it just the end that didn't flow well in your opinion, when I switched to my inverse rhymes? Cause I didn't see flow problems with the other 8 syllable rhymes (the ones in blue) I think that was cause I started them off and built up the momentum instead of switching it so fast like i did with the inverse

Nah, it was just the end that didn't flow great. The rest of it flowed pretty nicely, actually.

[Man1x]

Thanks bro, was it just the end that didn't flow well in your opinion, when I switched to my inverse rhymes? Cause I didn't see flow problems with the other 8 syllable rhymes (the ones in blue) I think that was cause I started them off and built up the momentum instead of switching it so fast like i did with the inverse

Nah, it was just the end that didn't flow great. The rest of it flowed pretty nicely, actually.

That's the perception I got too, I was focused on getting a super long inverse for show, I'm going to change it up though in final verse so it'll be no problem. Thanks for feed bro Oh, and if you want to hop on a deluxe edition track from my LP just PM me and I'll give topics to pick from.

[Man1x]

It got a little long at the end and if you were flowing to a beat it would probably sound awkward or you'd have to rush it.

Other than that it's fine.

And I dunno why you highlighted your rhymes, I like being able to find them on my own.

Haha, sorry. What do you think is good reasonable multi length? 4-5?

No it's not the multies, it's the length of the line.

Haha, my bad.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Ayo... the art looks INCREDIBLE! Not really must to say, since it's not done, but I really like what you've got!

[Words]

Really good, kinda felt it fall off at the end with the long lines. Lots of creative multi's
Sorry for the delay on this...I've had lots of shit go'n on

[SG.]

I really like what you've got, good everything really. I'm not going to go too in-depth until it's finished though.

[Man1x]

thanks game and zabe

[Man1x]

Yea, this wasn't were i wanted to end this but I'm just not motivated to write lately so this, ladies and gentleman is the close to this track and it is now finished.

[Sam.]

Bored ? or are you just being lazy .

[Man1x]

Bored ? or are you just being lazy .

Both kinda, anyway I changed out the lines so it's just a little different. But, hey I'm working on something new and I hope it makes some people grin. I never been good with word play or puns though
I'm just good at rhyming long and rhymes schemes, basically just stories. Sometimes my schemes go over you guys heads, this one was a simple scheme though, it had long rhymes though.