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by **JamaicanPattlez** » Oct 7th, '11, 18:11

Everywhere I go my flow is hated insanely,
Like I'm trying to make some growth but you plainly all hate me,
And lately it's been aching my back, it's so stressful,
I'm eighteen and I'm making shit whack? Oh well that's cool,
Fuck spitting, I drool out rhymes so sublime,
That by the time you find 'em, it's already past 9,
And I'm inclined to climb this shit with a vengeance you pricks,
I'm flying high in this bitch, lift-off you wenches and dicks,
Jesus, I may be new but I can prove that I'm dangerous,
Theme is fairly rude but you dudes are cantankerous,
War is my craft so get back or face a blizzard,
Cause I can scissor your lizard and rape your gizzards 'till your nips hurt,
Tempt me, I'll spit at 10-Speed and still outdo a Bentley,
I'm going gently, I hear the dead speak, wow dude, I think it's Kenny!
You faggots are huffing and puffing, and y'all can't even make it,
But I'm a bastard for cussing and cutting, applaud, I'm underrated.

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by **JamaicanPattlez** » Oct 7th, '11, 18:16

Geno wrote:No critique, dope.

Thanks man! Had to step it up a bit haha. I don't wanna get slept on.

by **Just Silver** » Oct 7th, '11, 18:20

pretty nice seemed sota tyler the creator ish

the warcraft punch was nice lol :y:

"And I'm inclined to climb this shit with a vengeance you pricks,
I'm flying high in this bitch, lift-off you wenches and dicks,"

reminded me of TTC lol idk :sweating:

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Oct 7th, '11, 18:28

Just Silver wrote:pretty nice seemed sota tyler the creator ish

the warcraft punch was nice lol

"And I'm inclined to climb this shit with a vengeance you pricks,
I'm flying high in this bitch, lift-off you wenches and dicks,"

reminded me of TTC lol idk

Haha thank you! It DOES kinda seems TTC-ish lol, but I didn't have him in mind while writing this. :y:

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Oct 7th, '11, 18:44

Hesky wrote:This was pretty nice indeed

There's some really dope bars in there. Raping gizzard, such a lovely thought

Nice rhymes though man!

That line took work to have it make sense, oh man. Thanks for the feed! :happy:

by **Words** » Oct 7th, '11, 18:46

Ha, thanks for the double feed. Accidently posted that twice. Anyway, bout this piece:

This piece was so dope, it made dope things look not so dope. :worship:

Loved the Warcraft/Blizzard punch
I read it kind of fast? Is it supposed to be? flowed really well the way I read it, so if I did it right, great flow. :y:

2nd piece of yours I've seen/fed, great stuff. Can't wait to see more :y:

by **mdemaz** » Oct 7th, '11, 18:48

Fucking sick piece...

Yo, that Bentley line made me lol.

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Oct 7th, '11, 18:52

Words wrote:Ha, thanks for the double feed. Accidently posted that twice. Anyway, bout this piece:

This piece was so dope, it made dope things look not so dope.
Loved the Warcraft/Blizzard punch
I read it kind of fast? Is it supposed to be? flowed really well the way I read it, so if I did it right, great flow.

2nd piece of yours I've seen/fed, great stuff. Can't wait to see more

Haha it's all good!

:worship:

That's amazing man, thank you!

I had it sorta fast-ish, so you most likely have the right flow to it. :y:

And again, thank you for the feed!

Haha I like the Bentley line too. :smoking:

by **BigBoss** » Oct 7th, '11, 18:54

by **Mr.DGAF** » Oct 7th, '11, 19:49

One of my favorites from you, man. The flow is on point, the rhymes are very good, solid structure, good vocab. I mean, this was technically a very impressive piece with some very nice punches. :y:

Mind returning the favor?http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=129850

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Oct 7th, '11, 20:38

Mr.DGAF wrote:One of my favorites from you, man. The flow is on point, the rhymes are very good, solid structure, good vocab. I mean, this was technically a very impressive piece with some very nice punches.

Mind returning the favor?http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=129850

It's actually my first time actually using punches haha. :sweating:

Thank you! And yeah, I'll feed ya, man. :y:

by **Jdubem** » Oct 9th, '11, 05:48

This is good dude you rhymed nice the whole time and have some good lines! I liked the vengeance you pricks and wenches and dicks line. It sounds like Tyler the Creator, but thats cause its good. I also liked the Tempt me, I'll spit and 10 speed and still out do a Bentley, Im going gently. That shit flows nice.

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Oct 9th, '11, 07:29

Jdubem wrote:This is good dude you rhymed nice the whole time and have some good lines! I liked the vengeance you pricks and wenches and dicks line. It sounds like Tyler the Creator, but thats cause its good. I also liked the Tempt me, I'll spit and 10 speed and still out do a Bentley, Im going gently. That shit flows nice.

Haha I particularly LOVE that line! That and the Warcraft line. :y:

Thanks for the feed! :happy:

by **Sam.** » Oct 9th, '11, 12:27

Good shit. :y:

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Oct 9th, '11, 13:47

Sam. wrote:Good shit.

Thanks man.

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