"Bars Of Assault" Feat Spyder.

[Sam.]

Some Horrorcore - ish thing that we did.

The truest writin, the dude ya whole crew is bitin
A landmark on the damn charts, new brutal titan.
Chauvinist ass throwin his Axe
~ with such astounding power ~
til it hits, and splits every bone in your back.
My track faults, don’t exist its impossible
You meet the asphalt to smash your monocle,
If you battlin Spyder, for me its of course win
With the archives of MacGyver to leave you short limbed
Like dwarfism, we all laugh at your structure
Rip you in half inside out so bad you combusted,
Ive made this new year resolution,
Ill pick a new way to slaughter but ill let him choose it
Pick apart a vet induce him til his cred is ruined
Then the next dude to step, met with execution.
Strangled with the mic cord, no oxygen to the brain
Put ya in the psyche ward gone from the game.
This, kid was chosen sick sip of the potion
Bestowed from gods to lips that he spoke with.
Various scriptures depicted his explosion
Cause when he spits its like monolith erosion.

I recruit vampires on twilights to donate me blood ,
Use my salivary spit to ferment the curd,
Make you gods loving child so that you die young ,
In search of my own spirit I spent the full night hung,
Swallow my own apple to keep the doctor away ,
Leave the grave alive but my souls here to stay,
My Ninja steps on your turf can cause earthquakes ,
Defeat the giver of all lives and pause birth rates,
For this verse I mortgaged almost all parts of me ,
Now I'm just a decapitated hand that writes blasphemy,
With 99 % blockage I accept death with a heavy heart ,
Operate on your brain cells and call it art,
There's no method to my madness as I digest my own stomach acid,
Giving insight to the blind with blown sockets,
My bars of assault can make your hair stand on ends,
Rock the craddle of luck guess accidents can happen again.

Link Of Feed:
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Sam
Spyder

[JamaicanPattlez]

This is very impressive. To be honest, I don't even know how to feed you guys, especially Spyder. Though Sam, I definitely like your verse. My favorite part was:

With 99 % blockage I accept death with a heavy heart ,
Operate on your brain cells and call it art,

I definitely liked it. Keep it up, man.

[J.R.]

Great piece. Loved it

[Sam.]

Thanks Guys !

Detailed Feed would have been appreciated doe.

[Mr.DGAF]

Awesome stuff, guys. Spyder, you continue to impress me with how you phrase things. It honestly reminds me of prime Em, to a lesser degree, because he'd phrase stuff so oddly that it ended up rhyming perfectly. Not much at all to criticize on this drop. Your multi game is on point to a point where it doesn't alter the flow at all, which is seriously awesome because that takes a lot of work, which I can tell you put into this verse. Good Stuff man.

Sam, to me your verses always have the more poetic feel to them. And that's totally a good thing. I don't really know how to describe it, because I can't really explain, it jus seems like I'm reading straight up poetry with some of your lines. And then you've got the clever opening line, I smirked at that, mostly because, as every other human being, I don't care for Twilight. So that was cool man. The first four lines were, for me, the best. They were the most clever part of the piece, and I really dug that.

If you need any other feed, hit me up, I like reading other people's ish.

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed guys

[Man1x]

You both killed it.

Basically all that's been said, here are my favorite lines.

Spyder:

Strangled with the mic cord, no oxygen to the brain
Put ya in the psyche ward gone from the game.

Sam:

I recruit vampires on twilights to donate me blood ,
Use my salivary spit to ferment the curd,
Make you gods loving child so that you die young ,
In search of my own spirit I spent the full night hung,

@Sam.....bitch

[mdemaz]

Spyder sorta wins here, he's got a heap more technical aspects involved with his structure that Sam lacks.

Don't get me wrong, Sam is on the right track, that vampire line was heavy.

[Sam.]

Spyder sorta wins here, he's got a heap more technical aspects involved with his structure that Sam lacks.

Don't get me wrong, Sam is on the right track, that vampire line was heavy.

Thanks man. I deliberately toned down on the Multis front.

thanks for the feed guys

Return some feed/s for the LOF you lazy bone.

[VenomBlackViper]

Sam I understand this is your first time doing the RA punches so i'm not fully discrediting you, but this was terrible. Not a single punchline made any sense.

"Swallow my own apple to keep the doctor away"

This was an exception, had you said "swallow my Adams Apple to keep the doctor away" this would have been a pretty fucking good punchline, as Adams Apple & keep the doctor away are cohesive.

"Use my salivary spit to ferment the curd"

So your saliva produces dairy products? Not really something you want to brag about in a horrorcore song.

"Rock the craddle of luck guess accidents can happen again."

There's no such thing as the "cradle of luck" & RA already used the punch "i'm the hand that rocks the cradle of filth"

"There's no method to my madness as I digest my own stomach acid"

The digesting your own stomach acid part was pretty clever, but what exactly does having no method to your madness have anything to do with that?

That's just some examples, some of the lines in here I literally have no comment on, just this " "

If you want to do Rhyme Asylum style punchlines the 2 common phrases need to work together, they need to be cohesive with one another, you can't just throw together 2 random common phrases (or make up your own phrases like "cradle of luck") & expect it to work. There's a difference between

"I get master degree burns after a heat stroke of genius"

and

"Leave the grave alive but my souls here to stay"

I will give you credit for even attempting this style though, hopefully you'll improve.

[Sam.]

Sam I understand this is your first time doing the RA punches so i'm not fully discrediting you, but this was terrible. Not a single punchline made any sense.

You're 100 % right there I got in this mood of writing yesterday as I was listening to them and wrote this in like 30-40 Minutes (Lame excuse I know).Didn't focus that much maybe that's why they are terrible.

"Use my salivary spit to ferment the curd"

So your saliva produces dairy products? Not really something you want to brag about in a horrorcore song.

Some kind of bacteria is used in fermenting curd,so by that saying that I meant there are some bacterial content in my Saliva.

"Rock the craddle of luck guess accidents can happen again."

There's no such thing as the "cradle of luck" & RA already used the punch "i'm the hand that rocks the cradle of filth"

"There's no method to my madness as I digest my own stomach acid"

The digesting your own stomach acid part was pretty clever, but what exactly does having no method to your madness have anything to do with that?

That's just some examples, some of the lines in here I literally have no comment on, just this " "

If you want to do Rhyme Asylum style punchlines the 2 common phrases need to work together, they need to be cohesive with one another, you can't just throw together 2 random common phrases (or make up your own phrases like "cradle of luck") & expect it to work. There's a difference between

"I get master degree burns after a heat stroke of genius"

and

"Leave the grave alive but my souls here to stay"

I will give you credit for even attempting this style though, hopefully you'll improve.

Rest is what you said yourself .Lol ,most of them were not meant to be punches or w/e but well.

All I wanna say is "Thank You" bruh ,this was the feed I was expecting.Next time maybe I'll step it up and be more cohesive in using those Phrases.

But in my personal opinion this was the best from the rest.

With 99 % blockage I accept death with a heavy heart

[Spyder]

Venom what u think of my verse

[Man1x]

I got some wordplay for you Sam, so whenever I'm not lazy and construct a verse, check it out cause it'll be there whether you see it or not.

Edit: Might be considered a little jab

[Sam.]

[Spyder]

peeps sleepin tbh