Trio - Out To Get Us

[Innovation]

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Innovation: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=127310&start=15
JamaicanPattlez: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=130923
GameTheory:

Writer's Block EP is coming people..

[Hook]

Three young men get a message from a dude,
We all set out, and we wonder if it's you,
But little did we know that our lives are jeopardized,
And this creepy stranger seems to have a bit of a surprise,
And who really knows what will truly happen next,
Is this an adversary we can try our might and best?
Keep following on, as we try to save our lives,
I can't believe this happenin', what a scary night!

[Innovation]

I get a text, "look outside", I drop my can of Pepsi,
All I see is a man in black wielding a damn machete,
Man that's scared me; check again he's seemingly vanished,
Another text - "scared yet?" as if he's hearing me panic,
The fear in me's manic, I start pacing up and down,
He's nearing me, I'm ready to be chased around the town,
I can't face this fucking clown, it's late no one's around,
My fate ain't in the ground, I'll make sure of it,
He isn't sawing off shit, I see a park in the distance,
He sent me another threat, "your heart will be missing",
I'm not gonna be apart of his system, I see Jam and Game,
This is damn insane, we turn around..

[Hook]

[JamaicanPattlez]

My text said "Get outside" and my mind said "Get your coat",
Thought my best had a surprise, but it's a guy with a rope,
Now my chest would rise and I felt the pulse in my throat,
So I guess I'm gonna die, but why does this feel so Occult?
I start to run from the man who's plan is to kill me,
But my guard was done, so I stand with hands feeling so chilly,
And really it feels like I'm in a cheesy horror movie,
So seemingly my brain yells "fuckin' feel these orders, pussy!"
It told me to sprint, gimped with the feeling of fear,
There's an imprint of a hand so I blinked and I hear,
This noise, two boys, were they employed by this guy?
My choice was to poise myself and destroy in disguise,
But yo wait a minute, I think I see Game!
Feeling second-winded, I went to explain,
And Innov running to us, what the fuck is this sayin'?
All of a sudden "Key Note" I hear, something is waiting...

[Hook]

[GameTheory]

I took a hold of my cellphone and I received this text
I was freaked when I read "you will meet with your death"
I immediately checked the window, then I see this man
Holding a black steel katana, in the wind he stands
I kept thinking about my fate, hoping he'd just vanish
So I grabbed my shit and left, running weeks of practice
He was nearing me, I speed up, tired but still living
I'm tired but hell's getting towards my soul, I ain't giving
This shit's just plain sickening, they got me all panicin'
I'm damaged from fear, can't turn around and savage em
Then I received this other text that said "Your best of effort isn't shit"
I thought of turning around and set for war but my record is a bitch
I settle for escape, I sat my eyes on the park and ran
I see Jam and Innovation stand, we turn around and bam...

[Outro]

To be continued..

[J.R.]

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And it's gametheory, not innovation xD

[Sam.]

Innovation

That was a nice story brah ,dope Rhymes with Multis supporting them beautifully.The only criticism is you could have finished the story properly at least.

JP

Mindblowing full line Rhyming attempt there.Not only did you maintain the story but managed to pull the Multi off very well.I really enjoyed your verse and best thing is this was a continuation to the Inno's
verse (sort off).

GT

Your verse was very much similar to Inno's verse but you told this in a more scenic way and I could actually imagine the whole thing that was going on in the verse.Everythings fine except too much use of "I's" to start the Bars.


Overall nice story guys and the way it came toghether at the end was dope.Keep at it.

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=131175
To Inno with love.

[the real slim shady]

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And it's gametheory, not innovation xD

its innovation's thread though

[Innovation]

Lmao!!! GameTheory, sir!

Innovation

That was a nice story brah ,dope Rhymes with Multis supporting them beautifully.The only criticism is you could have finished the story properly at least.

JP

Mindblowing full line Rhyming attempt there.Not only did you maintain the story but managed to pull the Multi off very well.I really enjoyed your verse and best thing is this was a continuation to the Inno's
verse (sort off).

GT

Your verse was very much similar to Inno's verse but you told this in a more scenic way and I could actually imagine the whole thing that was going on in the verse.Everythings fine except too much use of "I's" to start the Bars.


Overall nice story guys and the way it came toghether at the end was dope.Keep at it.

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=131175
To Inno with love.

Cheers mate, I'll return the feed soon enough! Thanks again.

[J.R.]

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And it's gametheory, not innovation xD

its innovation's thread though

Not his fault gametheory drops feed once every 293289327323273 months.

[the real slim shady]

Lmao!!! GameTheory, sir!

i thought it might be, but its your thread that im posting in now so i just thought i may as well direct it at you

[JamaicanPattlez]

Innovation

That was a nice story brah ,dope Rhymes with Multis supporting them beautifully.The only criticism is you could have finished the story properly at least.

JP

Mindblowing full line Rhyming attempt there.Not only did you maintain the story but managed to pull the Multi off very well.I really enjoyed your verse and best thing is this was a continuation to the Inno's
verse (sort off).

GT

Your verse was very much similar to Inno's verse but you told this in a more scenic way and I could actually imagine the whole thing that was going on in the verse.Everythings fine except too much use of "I's" to start the Bars.


Overall nice story guys and the way it came toghether at the end was dope.Keep at it.

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=131175
To Inno with love.

Thanks for the feed, man! Yeah, I try hard to make my stuff both lyrical and on point. I'm happy you caught that.

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And it's gametheory, not innovation xD

You gonna feed man?

[the real slim shady]

Thanks Sam, I appreciate it .. And you told me once to lay off the I's but I forgot lmao.

Can't see the pic, should upload it to a site like imgur.com and such tbh.

happy now?

About the OP: i like it, but the hook seems a bit rushed IMO... just a thought

[JamaicanPattlez]

Yeah, that was my hook. I just made it 5 minutes after Innovation posted the thread, lol.

[Sam.]

Lol.I see spamming.Reported.

[the real slim shady]

Yeah, that was my hook. I just made it 5 minutes after Innovation posted the thread, lol.

not bad, but kinda rushed... the last line of it just doesnt quite fit with all of the stuff you guys have done... just my opinion though

[JamaicanPattlez]

You were all great. IMO JP came the hardest with his multies, Inno with story telling, and GT had a good mixture of both.

My only problem with this piece is Inno's line:

My fate ain't in the ground, I'll make sure of it,

It seems very out of place, not rhyming with anything. I can't get it to rhyme with "distance". I dunno.

It was great though, keep it up.

I think Innov was rhyming the it part with Distance, lol. Thanks for the feed, brah.

[Innovation]

You were all great. IMO JP came the hardest with his multies, Inno with story telling, and GT had a good mixture of both.

My only problem with this piece is Inno's line:

My fate ain't in the ground, I'll make sure of it,

It seems very out of place, not rhyming with anything. I can't get it to rhyme with "distance". I dunno.

It was great though, keep it up.

I think Innov was rhyming the it part with Distance, lol. Thanks for the feed, brah.

It's apart of a different rhyme scheme, that's where I switched it. park in the distance/heart will be missing - I probably could have made it transition a bit better though.

Thanks for the feed though, Geno. Appreciated.

[JamaicanPattlez]

You were all great. IMO JP came the hardest with his multies, Inno with story telling, and GT had a good mixture of both.

My only problem with this piece is Inno's line:

My fate ain't in the ground, I'll make sure of it,

It seems very out of place, not rhyming with anything. I can't get it to rhyme with "distance". I dunno.

It was great though, keep it up.

I think Innov was rhyming the it part with Distance, lol. Thanks for the feed, brah.

It's apart of a different rhyme scheme, that's where I switched it. park in the distance/heart will be missing - I probably could have made it transition a bit better though.

Thanks for the feed though, Geno. Appreciated.

Ohh, okay lol. That makes sense then.