Love [TRACK 5]

[SG.]

[Chorus (Sung)]

You think you can call this love?
You think I made this all frigged up?
Really it's you, it was always you
And every one of your affairs would say the same too

[Verse]

I've just been sitting 12 hours, listening to Kim
Fuck, Em had it right when he said bitches aren't friends
You're nagging at me, "who never put the bins out?"
But who brought you home when you went with your friends and binged out?
Oh, you do everything here? Where's YOUR fucking paycheck?
Last time I looked, you didn't pay for this Maybach
I'm lying, there's no Maybach, when would I earn that much?
Why do things with us always seem to turn out as such?
It seems to me that we could easily learn to stop
Never a loving embrace or kiss, it burns to touch
My brain's crumbling away, I've having a mental breakdown
What the fuck have you done to me, I'm such as resentful dane now
We took vows, still you're a cow, my face is foul, not fair
All to think my first date is married to me and scowling there
It seems that for every choice, I always choose you
Till death do us part, guess I'm gonna kill you

[Chorus (Sung)]

You think you can call this love?
You think I made this all frigged up?
Really it's you, it was always you
And every one of your affairs would say the same too

[Interlude - Female]

Where are you taking me?
Tell me where we're going!
What the hell is that?
Oh God... no, please... Please!
*sound of cutting flesh and screaming*

[Interlude - Zabe]

I just killed because of lies, where's the Bonnie to my Clyde?

[Outro (Sung)]

And this ain't love
And this ain't love
We could never make up

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[J.R.]

WOW! I could feel the raw emotion considering love is a subject I struggle with myself. This piece had great multies and flow, dope inner rhymes, and just overall was incredible. Simple rhymes at parts, but overall, dope as hell. Favorite line:

I've just been sitting 12 hours, listening to Kim
Fuck, Em had it right when he said bitches aren't friends

[Sam.]

Perfect verse man.
The bars were phrased properly and you did well on the other technical areas too. This is your best piece in a while I guess.Keep this form for the Competition.

8/10

[SG.]

Thanks Nutz and Sam.

[Atone]

not sure if you were goin for the "Kim" style track but thats how this felt, and i liked it, the chorus wasn't all that good tho, and some of your lines ran a lil to long, but this was good

[Man1x]

It was good, nothing I can really say bad about it. Only thing you could've done was be more original with the concept and brach away from the Kim style, I mean you can but it'd make it original. It was still dope and if you didn't intend Kim then I'm sorry, you kind of set that mood though.

[SG.]

Thanks Atone and Man1x. Yeah, this was a deliberate homage to Kim.

[Mr.DGAF]

Zabe, my man, you're getting pretty good. This verse is awesome. The content and how you delivered it was pretty clever. The ryhmes were at some point a bit iffy, at least for me. You may be using some kind of accent, but it seemed a bit forced on lines like this:

It seems to me that we could easily learn to stop
Never a loving embrace or kiss, it burns to touch

Those lines were the only part where I wasn't feeling it too much. The rest of it was pretty much solid. This was my favorite part:

My brain's crumbling away, I've having a mental breakdown
What the fuck have you done to me, I'm such as resentful dane now

Pretty dope drop there man, and I'm digging the new pic haha. If it's what I'm thinking it is, then it's Sully from Uncharted?

Anywho, good drop.

[mdemaz]

Ok.

Light use of entendres here and that is pretty cool.
Moderate level of multies.
The content was ok, but like the other guys said, there was some excellent choice of words to describe situations.
Vocab was great, bars flowed pretty good in my head.

Good work, keep it up.