Ego ft. JP - Hell On Earth

[Mr.DGAF]

This was hot guys, I really enjoyed reading this. I personally think Geno came out the best, but it was all great. For Ego, you guys have a ton if chemistry together. And JP came hard too.

Geno, great flow, vocab, everything. It was awesome.

Menzo, The first four lines were my favorite, I really liked the rhyme scheme there.

JP, you're becoming a stand out writer. The last couple of lines flowed and were worded beautifully.

[JamaicanPattlez]

This was hot guys, I really enjoyed reading this. I personally think Geno came out the best, but it was all great. For Ego, you guys have a ton if chemistry together. And JP came hard too.

Geno, great flow, vocab, everything. It was awesome.

Menzo, The first four lines were my favorite, I really liked the rhyme scheme there.

JP, you're becoming a stand out writer. The last couple of lines flowed and were worded beautifully.

Thanks man! I think we all did pretty well.

[Mr.DGAF]

JP's "Maple leaf is red / maitre'd of death" rhyme was his best and my personal favourite. Good creativity.

We put him on this for a reason.

He's good.

Yeah, my favorite part as well. That's the part of his verse that really impressed me.

[JamaicanPattlez]

You all are too kind.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Nice drops homies, I really enjoyed this piece. I was clearly the outcast in this one

Love what my Canadian emcees are dropping though, gives me hope for our nation

Funny thing is, I wrote this in a writer's block. Goes to show, with every block is a crack of creativity!


And we're gonna rule Canada. Just watch.

[JamaicanPattlez]

I wrote mine yesterday on the spot too, maybe 20-ish minutes it took? Idunno. Point is, I'm surprised it turned out well tbh.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Nice drops homies, I really enjoyed this piece. I was clearly the outcast in this one

Love what my Canadian emcees are dropping though, gives me hope for our nation

You rhymed "83 percent" of your verse and you're the outcast?

Silly Menzo

I think I'm the black sheep in this one....




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[JamaicanPattlez]

86% Although I might be a bit biased.

I see what JP did there

It's black magic.

[Sam.]

Geno

Your verse was good only in bits and pieces.Somehow the content could not arrest my interest as compared to your previous work.Sorry,I'm dissapointed.


Menzo

Good to see that you are trying out full Bar Rhyming.The 1st 4 Bars has some noticable forced Multis but the the next set of bars that followed were iight.I noticed that you used a different Rhyme Scheme in the 2nd half of the verse which was good.

JP

You came out with the best verse from the whole collab.No Criticism man ,just keep slayin 'em.

The Maple Leaf is red from the blood of your kin,
I'm the Maitre'd of Death, so come on and let's sin,

Dope as Pope.

[Sam.]

You madz son?

Trying out/Using/A hand at.

[J.R.]

Pretty dope all around, Geno took it but I really really liked JP's verse. Keep it up, maybe JP should consider doing more tracks with ego, y'all go together well.

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133225 <- RTF?

[Sam.]

Appreciate the feed Sam, but can you point out where you feel it's forced? It's own thing to mention it, but to high light it can only help me grow and 'avoid' it in the future.

IDK what's your Def'n of Forced Multis doe(..lmaooooooooooooooooo) but here's the part that I was talking about.

With showering flames, Hell reigns on the earth
Will power and strength, well they never serve

Now you may not agree but hear me out ,what I think is if a Bar has certain syllables that seem strange as to what you are trying to say or what the reader interprets from it then it's obvious that they are used for the sake of Multis.


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The thing that I notices here is that the Syllables didn't match (Maybe I'm wrong).

Kill hours with slayin’, I smell pain in the works
Ill, foul and plagued, spells Alieus curse

smell pain in the works ~ This is a long Multi
spells Alieus curse

[Sam.]

They both have 5 syllables ^

smell (1) pain (1) in (1) the (1) works (1) = 5
spells (1) Alieus (3) curse (1) = 5

Just 'cause it looks longer means nothing.

In fact, the whole bar is the exact same amount of syllables, 10.

I said that I could be wrong,thanks for the correction. I fucked up the 2nd Bar Syllable count,I guess.

Iight Menzo stick with the 1st Part of the last post.lol

[Sam.]

Yeah !I guessed how you Rhymed it doe.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Thanks Sam and Nutz! I'm down for working with Ego anytime.