You wouldnt, would you??

[Jdubem]

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So..
What if it were possible for one to be invincible?
Would you sell your soul to the devil, do something indefensible?
Is power that important you'd let go of every principle?
Before you start with the scrutiny consider the opportunity
Temptation staring you in the face, calling conscience to mutany
Its a sensation you cant replace, saying this boring life aint suiting me
For some reason I crave more, whats this world teasing me for?
Tempting me to treason during war and luring me to an evil reward
Why should I do good in a world where morality is an abnormality
People try and act it, but thats just a formality
Its true purpose is to act it on the surface and not wonder whats beneath
Theres truly few people who arent worthless, theres ugly things underneath
Consequences erased you'll do whatever it takes to get ahead of the rest of the world
Whether thats murdering a fed or going to bed with your best friends girl
So would you be willing to sell your soul for a gold mine?
Make a killing, risk going to hell, thats crossing a bold line
But hey you dont gotta dwell, shit I already sold mine

[Sam.]

That's impressive piece of work there mate.Cleverly written and has some good Quotable's too.The flow seems a little odd but if given a slow approach ,it posses no problem,at least to me.No criticism man ,this is plane awesome.There are deep thought all over the verse,they can be related to real life too.

Keep slayin 'em.

[Jdubem]

Much appreciated bro. I got this concept from a few earlier rhymes that I had written and decided to try and run with it. Best shit I've written and yeah I was thinking slow flow with that.

[Jdubem]

bump

[Jdubem]

watup any other feed?

[Jdubem]

Thanks man. I appreciate the criticism there just as much as the complements. The flow is kinda crazy on those 4 bars. I think I got a little caught up on the concept there and didnt focus as much on the flow which you cant really be doing tho on a verse so thanks for pointing that out. And yeah Im getting more into this whole writing thing now so I'll try and keep them coming.