World of WorDscraft

[Words]

Depending on what you guys think, I may actually record this one.
Feedback Link: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=132971&p=1798664#p1798664
Beat (Shady 2.0 Cypher): http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uUObPux66kc

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Take this beat and loop it, I'll take the beat and use it,
to do shit real abusive, and spit this hip-hop music
Call this verse your eulogy, won't stand for this tomfoolery.
You're just a fool you see? Take'n you back to school don't flee.
I'm killing this shit lyrically, WorDs you gotta be kidding me.
How can you really be, lyrically, perfectly- to the T.
How could I really ever be? Hmm well let me see:
I'm crooked like a neck that you slept on wrong.
I'm bitter like a foot that you stepped on dog.
I'm quicker enough, to fastly surpass a jog. (run)
Really I'm a fucking maverick, I'm just so hella spastic.
My heights are so drastic, like a I'm from park-Jurassic
Think back to your past, did ya pastor tragic brain blast ya?
Build a plaster cast, and wrap it back together faster.
My words of knowlage, hit'n you like passing traffic.
Thias is some rough shit, like you're lacking chapstick.
Do you like how I'm talking now? Making this shit profound?
Laughing rolling 'round. That's a ROFLing two-fifty pounds,
But now more fucking 'round, like tipping a fucking cow.
Back to this buisness is this....How about you take me serious now?

[Man1x]

Good flow and good multis but the only critism I would have is that your not your not really saying anything, that's how it feels to me anyway. If I'm missing the big picture I'm sorry. Feed me?:

http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133477

[Sam.]

Tecninally this was a decent piece but the content lost it's lusture half way through,till then it managed to hold my interest.But then again the way you used the Rhyme Scheme reminded me of Geno's style of Rhyming.

To see the real picture, you managed to structure it perfectly to the beat.

Really I'm a fucking maverick, I'm just so hella spastic.
My heights are so drastic, like a I'm from park-Jurassic

See, there was no need to use the word "park" there, it threw of the flow for me, try and not repeat this next time.

Keep slayin 'em.

[Words]

Bumping

[Sam.]

@ people who don't feed newcomers like Words, seriously wtf is this ?

[Words]

:facepalm @ people who don't feed newcomers like Words, seriously wtf is this ?

I'd really like some more feed on this....bump?

[Words]

:facepalm @ people who don't feed newcomers like Words, seriously wtf is this ?

I'd really like some more feed on this....bump?

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