Session Eleven

[Blu]

Ah, back to creative writing.
Beat is at the bottom, and it's optional. Start it at 22 seconds though.

Now I guess it's time to spark some creativity
I dragged her to the park but man she just ain't into me
Nickname's Nostradamus, or Mr. Don't Give a Fuck
You think when I was born, you think I live to SUCK?!
Stab myself with a thorn, now baby here's a buck
Bitch I ain't into Korn, so you can hop out the truck
I'd rather 'cord gay porn than hoard sleigh horns
After I'm done slayin' Santa,
Guess what? I ain't playin' Montana!
Shit it's incredible the way I send these words
And somehow I just manage to bend these verbs
But this is what comes with a big Ego
But we know, cuz this is how I react, GENO!
Enough with the crappy call-outs
Cuz ya'll are a bunch of happy fall-outs
Session one? Nah! This is Session eleven,
You're next destination is heaven!
I won't be meetin' you there though, I ordered my tickets to Hell!

[Mr.DGAF]

You've certainly improved, most notable with your inners. The multies could still use some work, they're still a bit on the simple side. The short bars hinder the flow a bit, for me, but it goes with the beat so I can't really complain too much there. But you've gotten better man, just keep writing to knock them out, and try and expand your vocabulary. That's the biggest thing, it will help immensely with the multies.

And preciate the name drop haha, you must have put that in there real fast, I just dropped that peice.

[Blu]

I name dropped you two because I read your guys' pieces the most.
Strictly out of respect haha.

[Words]

When I read this piece the first time I did it w/o the beat and it was pretty good. Lyrically, a really great piece. Then I read it with the beat and it flowed perfectly with it. I did take some pauses and kept going, like:
"Guess what? [pause] I ain't playin' Montana!"
I don't know if it was supposed to be that way, but with the beat adding a pause there seemed right.
A good piece though, it was lyrical, flowed nicely and had a good concept.

[Blu]

When I read this piece the first time I did it w/o the beat and it was pretty good. Lyrically, a really great piece. Then I read it with the beat and it flowed perfectly with it. I did take some pauses and kept going, like:
"Guess what? [pause] I ain't playin' Montana!"
I don't know if it was supposed to be that way, but with the beat adding a pause there seemed right.
A good piece though, it was lyrical, flowed nicely and had a good concept.

Thanks Words! Yeah man, that pause WAS intentional. I was afraid no one would catch it.

But anyways, thanks man.