Thoughts Inside

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Nov 8th, '11, 21:08

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Rebirth of a genius, or the spawn of a villain,
These words are the previous songs of the willing,
And I disturb with verbs, but I long for some feeling,
This world is my turf, and like a con I'm concealing,
There's a topic on my mind, and it's driving me nuts,
So I'ma mock this on my time, and I don't give any fucks,
Kids are popping bottles while thugs are popping caps,
But some are now in college, while others are offing cats.
And yes it is a fact that most of them are black,
But Zack was taking crack, and y'all forgetting that?
And he was Hispanic, but they focus on the negro,
Weed is problematic, but they notice the Latinos,
You confront people on this, and they freeze up like Jack Frost,
But among this legal shit, we bleed up like Vag Falls,
Cause we're known to be on you like the piss down your leg,
So don't make us overthrow you like the shit in your head.

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Nov 9th, '11, 03:25

Thanks, man haha. Appreciate the feed, pahtnah. :smoking:

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Nov 9th, '11, 03:32

Menzo wrote:Speaking from the mind, this is raw realness right here folks You rhymed your fuckin ass off and also high lighted the racism that still occurs in our society to this day. Great work man.

Thank you sir! You got it already. :y:

Felt like I had to put this out, cause racism is a topic anyone can relate to.

by **Words** » Nov 9th, '11, 15:59

Wow Pattlez, flow in this was amazing. Rhyming was perfect, I really don't have any criticism for you. This was overall a really good piece. Your writing is impressive, have you recorded anything?

Don't know why, but this part stood out for me.

There's a topic on my mind, and it's driving me nuts,
So I'ma mock this on my time, and I don't give any fucks,

Good work here bro :y:

Mind feeding one of my new pieces back? either of these two if you do:
World of WorDscraft- viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133478
Outcast- viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133578

by **JamaicanPattlez** » Nov 9th, '11, 19:31

Words wrote:Wow Pattlez, flow in this was amazing. Rhyming was perfect, I really don't have any criticism for you. This was overall a really good piece. Your writing is impressive, have you recorded anything?

Don't know why, but this part stood out for me.
There's a topic on my mind, and it's driving me nuts,
So I'ma mock this on my time, and I don't give any fucks,

Good work here bro
Mind feeding one of my new pieces back? either of these two if you do:
World of WorDscraft- viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133478
Outcast- viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133578