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Just For Fun (sort of a new style)

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Just For Fun (sort of a new style)

Postby Atone » Nov 12th, '11, 11:22

i kinda went with a lil comedy/joke rap with this one,

(Intro)
Guess......who's.....back

(Verse)
Whippin my dick out waitin for you to suck it
haters will be on my balls til i kick the bucket-
fuck it- i love it, but you mother fuckers can't touch this
i bust shit so sick you flip i can't be fucked with
iller than your average, i'm killin all these rappers
half assin on the mic i throw em off the map and-
attack em like a mac truck, screw all these wack fucks
imma be a fuckin monster in this rap shit
have you mad like my raps are made to smack kids
tellin your son to run up in school with a gun
shoot up every one of the teachers just for fun
just be dumb
awww whats wrong? you got bullied all your life
don't cry, grab a knife, walk up and stab your neibors wife
revenge is sweet- aint it nice
man these days some shit could be taken the wrong way
people gettin mad at some of the jokes i say
even my ex said i was to weird, i felt defeated
than i rememberd, her opinion became invalid the minute she cheated
so i stuck my fist in her teeth, told the bitch to eat it
won't ever let anybody change me, this is who i am, take it or leave it
your opinion aint needed
stop sayin i can't rap, i don't see you assholes writin a rhyme
and stop tellin me to seek help, i know i aint right in the mind
been fucked in the head since i jumped off the pier
hit the rocks and since then i had no fear
just walk around laughin at pain, drinkin all the beer
you could kick me in the nuts with steel toes and i wouldn't shed a tear
go ahead, try me
mother fucker i'll put you in the E.R and poison ya I.V
and i walk around with my pants hangin low, don't give a fuck if your parents don't like me
if i wanna date a chick, i just tell her i gotta fold my dick in half
and she's hungry i'll take her to arby's, and then back to my crib to crash
and if she ends up cheatin, i'll break every one of her ribs and laugh
fuck you bitch, yeah i'm sick, damn right i'm pissed
i was born with a gun at my head and a blade on my wrist
98 percent chance to die before the age of twenty four
so gimmi about 16 more days but there will be plenty more
don't go and break the news yet, don't jump the gun
i got a life worth livin, this rap shit is just for fun



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Re: Just For Fun (sort of a new style)

Postby autotooner » Nov 12th, '11, 19:45

dope shit bro. I really liked the rhymes in the first half, they flowed really well. I could definitely picture the old Em spitting some shit like this. :y:

Do you have any plans to record it?
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Re: Just For Fun (sort of a new style)

Postby Sam. » Nov 12th, '11, 20:14

For a bizzare looking verse this shit is really dope. Liked the Humor that you brought up in this, it was the highlighting part of the verse.Judging by the structure which is kinda fucked up, I'm sure this is key style. I've seen you do this a lot of times before, so there's nothing new IMO.

I would love to see a well structured verse touching a different subject matter from you someday. :coffee:
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Re: Just For Fun (sort of a new style)

Postby Atone » Nov 12th, '11, 23:32

Sam. wrote:For a bizzare looking verse this shit is really dope. Liked the Humor that you brought up in this, it was the highlighting part of the verse.Judging by the structure which is kinda fucked up, I'm sure this is key style. I've seen you do this a lot of times before, so there's nothing new IMO.

I would love to see a well structured verse touching a different subject matter from you someday. :coffee:


thats what i been tryin to do, before i put out a new mixtape i wanna find other subjects to talk about
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Re: Just For Fun (sort of a new style)

Postby mdemaz » Nov 13th, '11, 00:11

No thanks, but I like the concept.
You need some structure though.
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