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Game Over

Postby Spyder » Nov 20th, '11, 22:40

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133804 LOF


Keep comparin me to others but id rather be left alone
Ill just continue to say same shit til my message known,
Never Thoughtless just spit tracks that bless the throne
You cant stop me, I use others Writers Blocks as Steppin Stones.
So let the lesson unfold, fact remains you cant touch Spyder
Omnipotent writer writtens’ll spark and bust fire,
Got the Sickest Flow, ya you alright, im just nicer
I cant Stop this Shit, dudes rhyme books got too much Fiber!
I, seem to be prone to condone all these action tricks
they hear my massive hits, and love em, that make em a masochist haha
how can I teach these clowns when the class is shit
ill beat each down, bout the only way you see me Pass-a-Fist!! (pacifist)

They said I was nothing, said I was droppin it -
But as far as im concerned - its just the opposite.
Keep sayin you bring flames you lame posers
But ima be the last man standin when the games over.


My tracklist don’t fit you if your alright and jolly
These whack shits get mad, then try to bite and copy,
And that’s it, its not my fault y’all cypher sloppy
You Mike and Molly, Fat Bitch need different Writers Prolly!
Just try and stop me, make Clocks stop to Watch me
Flow like on Ocean til I know that the Sea Saw me,
Yes the center of attention, remain this way til you all done
If you hot ill leave you like Mighty Macs… Ball Nun!!
Even my biggest haters gotta hand it to me
They read the papers and cant stand what they see,
This rap game aint going the way I planned it to be
Man why is it that Pussies always Land on their Feet?

They said I was nothing, said I was droppin it -
But as far as im concerned - its just the opposite.
Keep sayin you bring flames you lame posers
But ima be the last man standin when the games over.


I know to keep my head up before I doubt points n’
Still keep rippin with writtens like spittin out poison.
Cause I know im winnin each game prior to coin flips
Got so many raps I always drop Two Albums, call me Double Jointed!
You lookin up for a guiding light, but blind by skies
But my God like resemblance is something to see ‘In Idle-Eyes’!! (and idolize)
My tracks run at paces unmatchable til you develop asthma
Til your Brain Matter becomes Stateless like Plasma!
Rappers must be Autistic, cause no man can further me,
Bunch of kids who Borderline Intelligence like Homeland Security!!
My murder streak started from evolution, a Fish was a milestone
Cause when I Emerge-in-Sea, 9-1-1 will give ya the dial tone. (emergency)

They said I was nothing, said I was droppin it -
But as far as im concerned - its just the opposite.
Keep sayin you bring flames you lame posers
But ima be the last man standin when the games over.
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Re: Game Over

Postby Sam. » Nov 20th, '11, 23:15

This is absolute fire, just like the drop before "ANBOB".

IDK what to feed you man, seriously. The only thing that comes to mind is that you could have made the Punchline's more complex, so complex that it'll rattle your brain and make you think more than twice as to what is being said.

Liked every aspect of it.

Keep slayin 'em. :y:
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Re: Game Over

Postby Spyder » Nov 21st, '11, 01:37

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Re: Game Over

Postby Man1x » Nov 21st, '11, 01:44

Nice piece, really what Sam said. One question though. Did you bite me here?:

Pass-a-Fist!! (pacifist)

Cause I did this with...Zabe on Massacre One, I just didn't highlight it out:

"You'll need a massive stich if you pass a fist and blast the mist"

I don't care, the way I used it wasn't even good anyway but I just want to know :y: :wave:
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Re: Game Over

Postby Spyder » Nov 21st, '11, 04:53

no ive never read ur piece and reading urs i dont see it as a pacifist vibe

but thanks for the feed bro
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Re: Game Over

Postby Man1x » Nov 21st, '11, 05:03

Spyder wrote:no ive never read ur piece and reading urs i dont see it as a pacifist vibe

but thanks for the feed bro


Yea, well I told I didn't execute it well. And again, pretty amazing piece. You record?
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Re: Game Over

Postby Spyder » Nov 21st, '11, 18:17

Man1x wrote:You record?


i try and fail.

if i start with the beat i instantly block my thoughts because im so concentrated on a flow i cant think of lyrics.

if i write then adapt it to a beat, im so worried about my flow my delivery comes off as talking because im trying to hit the right part of the beat.


its a shame really
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