A Thought of the Moment

[Xray]

In the storm of the rain, the drip of insanity
I'm warm in the vein and ripping my allergies
Dropped in the pain and I'm robbed from my aim
Zip my mouth then I'm lost in the tape
Listen now, can't stop this late
Live as an owl and I'm twisting my faith
Freedom in the air and it's riggid where it counts
Devil's in my beer and I figured it's my shout
Drink till the line of my body is flat
You're thinking I'm blind but I see through the gap
I fear for ya in fact, cause you're clearing your tracks
Gonna fall off the map, and you can't walk back
You can talk all that but the wise get heard
Torcher your mind till the lights get burned
On this tip of the cliff, I fear these hills
Cause I'll live in the mist and I can't see well

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[Words]

It flowed well, it rhymed well. Technically a good piece.
However, it didn't seem like you were saying much, like every other bar was a random tangent. To me it just didn't have a very clear message or meaning tied to it. Other than that the Technical aspects of the piece were good. Keep it up