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[Track 1] Welcome back, Didn't miss you.

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[Track 1] Welcome back, Didn't miss you.

Postby J.R. » Jan 9th, '12, 22:20

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H812RxooQpQ -Beat.

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[Demon Voice]
Welcome back. As much as we regret this fiasco, we knew this day would come.
The day someone would try to fight back..
Now just lean back and relax.
This won't hurt a bit..

[Verse 1 -Starts at :17]
The shit erks, it hurts and it's worse,
That I jerk away, from being imprisoned a day,
After I make such good things happen to myself,
this may come off mysterious to you as well,
and this verse seems to not make any sense..
But I've been cleansed, and I've sensed,
that music of today's time, are pieces of shit.
so let me envision the future as I've been seeing it
let me paint a picture, and let me mix this mixture,
Damage caused by Society? we can fix ya'.

[Chorus on instrumental]


[Verse 2- My Demons]
No, You see that beautiful picture you dream to draw,
Isn't what's been deemed for you at all,
The future is what the future must be,
so keep your hands off the image, it's getting dusty.
and the lust you have for us, it's rusty,
So not trust thee, we must see,
or else you'll uncover the truth..
Your another pawn being used..

[Chorus/Outro on instrumental]
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Re: [Track 1] Welcome back, Didn't miss you.

Postby RKOunion » Jan 11th, '12, 15:57

Decent. Had it's flaws, but I enjoyed it overall.

Nice content. The rhyming was weak. Flow was choppy at parts.

My favorite lines

No, You see that beautiful picture you dream to draw,
Isn't what's been deemed for you at all,


Goes perfectly well after the chorus.
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Re: [Track 1] Welcome back, Didn't miss you.

Postby Atone » Jan 11th, '12, 22:38

a couple of your lines dragged on but other than that, i liked this, not sure if you were trying to have a message within this but if you did i think i caught it, and i liked it.
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