Struggles Of A Christian

[JamaicanPattlez]

Something I co-wrote for a buddy, he's going through a tough time, and sent me a verse. I ended up completely re-wrote the entire thing. Family references aren't my family, and that's not my girlfriend lol. Anyway, y'all enjoy!

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I'm so stressed, I'm afraid I'm close to death,
Whether it be the debt, the violence or the meth,
I'm so full of fear, I can see it in my dreams,
Even in my mind I can't breathe and as it seems,
My rage can't be contained, that's why I flame these fuckin' lames,
These haters like to blame, you're shook? Keep playing your bluffing game,
My soul's taken years for me to find,
Now I'm cold and feel forsaken, and I'm locked in my own mind,
I always try to un-wind, and I confide in the divine,
Yet my faith feels un-defined, and either way I try,
Someone's gonna cry, so what happens if I die?
What'll my momma try, when I resort to crime?
I'll wink to her from above, and fly like a dove,
Sometimes I've had enough, but I have a heart full of love,
For my girl Trina, I've known the feeling since I seen her,
She means the whole world to me, I feel glee and never weaker,
Same goes for little sister Bean, Syd, and Sue,
Grannie too, when I go, what the fuck will they do?
If I perished from Earth, I don't see it as a curse,
That's why I cherish the whole world, even when the things get worse,
But that's why I'ma chill, I don't want to make this major,
I'll be thrilled on the elevator or even the escalator,
To see my homie Jesus, my only Salvador,
He's the one who cleans my soul, and airs out all the mold,
I guess whether or not I repent will decide my grimy fate,
And whether or not my bros get to see me old.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Bump.

[Mr.DGAF]

Hmm, I liked it. There were some parts where the rhyming was kind of simple but I feel like oyu definitely made up for it with the message. You said what you wanted to really well, for the most part. I felt like once you mentioned names, it kind of fell a bit. But it's not like it was bad really, just that I felt the first part before that was really good.

All in all, solid piece dude, the emotion was captured nicely.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Thanks bro. It's all good, I just wanted to share this because when I was proof-reading it, I was like "Whoa, this is powerful. " So I'm happy the message got across.