Eloquence (aka RainMan44) ft. Geno - I Tried

[RainMan44]

Beat: http://www.shadowville.com/122377/genre ... /sad-story
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The bridge, which is after the 2nd chorus...goes along with the little jingle/bell sound...Not hard at all to catch on...only reason I put that there is because I didn't want to leave it empty. Whatever.
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[Talking] Man, I just go crazy...I just go fuckin' nuts...every....time that I realize....that,



(Verse 1 RainMan44)

Now somebody else got you, in his arms to hold
And that ain't right, when compared to the care I showed
That ain't fair but yo, I can only blame myself
I shoulda spoke my mind, instead I just complained and felt
Like the good things in life were 'posed to come for free
And out of nowhere, you was gon' develop love for me
That isn't how it works, that's somethin' that I quickly learned
And by the time that I realized, my heart, it had swiftly burned
Poisoned and tainted, I was selfish thinkin' like that
That I could have you just by SITTIN' like that
Not even makin' a tiny effort to say "hi," back- WHY THAT?
No clue, guess emotions had control of my brain
I- know it's insane, finally I know what is pain
Wished to be together in the sunshine, but now alone in the rain
But just know, that with you, my heart's forever occupied
But I can't even tell myself, "HEY, at least you tried!"



(Chorus - RainMan44) (x2)
Can't even look in the mirror, tell myself that I tried
'Cause every time that I do, man I know it's a lie
Feelin' colder inside, as the days progress
This feeling's something that I wish I could lay to rest



(Verse 2 RainMan44)

You know that feeling when you want somethin' so bad ya,
Convinced yourself that...you gon' get it, no matter
The odds and the hurdles that you've got to overcome?
Just so you can get the chance to forever hold the one
That you want? But as soon as you know it, years pass
And the very first sign of some fuckin' tears flash
Then all that's left is bein' angry at your weird ass
For not capitalizin' on that slim chance? That you had,
Back when? Well to me that's happened, I feel like crap and..
They can keep sayin' there's more fish in, the sea
But they wouldn't, if they was in the same position as me
You was special, made me feel a way I'd never felt, see
Never again will, maybe these are just the cards that God dealt me
And please know this, I just wanted you to know that
'Cause it's something that's been killin' me, and I can no longer hold back
(...I can no longer hold back)



(Chorus - RainMan44) (x2)
Can't even look in the mirror, tell myself that I tried
'Cause every time that I do, man I know it's a lie
Feelin' colder inside, as the days progress
This feeling's something that I wish I could lay to rest

(Bridge Rainman44)
With, out you, I'm lost
I said,
With, out you, I'm lost



(Verse 3 Geno)

Her name was Melissa, she would glisten when I kissed her,
We were best friends, she always listened when I whispered,
Even syllables I spit she'd remember when they're written,
She's benevolent and heaven sent, but never into wishin',
And she always ducked out if the tension were to thicken,
Left me thinkin', "what now?" so we severed our commitment,
Jealousy was big and we would hate each other's new friends,
It bothered me more, until my dating life was ruined,
Then her boyfriend swooped in and took her away,
I was shook, but in place, and the look on her face?
I knew I couldn't get her back, you can't push it with fate,
And I ain't gonna fake, being mushy and lame,
So there's my tale of affection and how I came to depression,
It's so famous it's fresh but still tainted with lessons,
I paint it my best so you can maybe learn from it,
Give it a shake of the head when you hear, "your baby girl's bluffin'"

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Wow guys nice piece!! I liked the topic a lot. Everything seemed to flow really well. I liked Genos verse a lot and rain man came hard too!! Great job to both on this one. looking forward to some more stuff from you guys! keep it up

[Mr.DGAF]

This is pretty dope man. This was a passionate verse Rain (or Eloquence haha), I really liked it. Rhyming was the same as always, pretty straightforward with some nice multies and the flow was on point for sure. But the words packed a punchN I definitely felt what you were spitting.

Geno, another nice feature. Did a good job getting into the idea, and the verse was pretty tight. Always nice rhyming, ireally liked the first scheme. For a feature verse, you nailed the concept, I was impressed, good stuff man.

[RainMan44]

Thanks for the feed everyone, if y'all got pieces that need to be fed, link me and I will

And about my verse sounding passionate, it's weird because...This occurred back in 10th grade, I fucking LOVED this girl, never had the balls to tell her though...and 3-4 years later here I am, one day just randomly remembering it......And for the while it took me to write these verses, it's like I had that feeling again, that feeling I used to get about her. Regret that shit to this day man.

[Mr.DGAF]

Rain, the same shit is happening to me right now. It's really fucking annoying. Maybe that's why I liked your verse so much, besides the obvious stuff. It kinda resonated with me.

[RainMan44]

It does suck, I say just tell her
...but I know how hard that is sometimes depending on the predicament

ima feed ur piece right now Insane