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Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Just Silver » Jul 6th, '12, 19:47

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just a quick keystyle to get back in the movement
was inspired by Casey Veggies instrumental for Toe Tag

Tricky flow btw

Engage X games, do tricks get paid, get laid next name
I dont know her the next day, like a Vet came
I be doin it doggy, crystal clear no foggy
Got it jumping like froggys, from the stage to the lobby
In my gamemode, a hobby, i can rape flows im probably
Different with it switchin it like ignorant bitches digits-- (flow gets faster)
Tryin to go in to get it, you know my sharp opinion
Sharks intended mixed with marksman extensions
I always start to get it from the entrance to the finish
Thats double the work then replenished
Yes i said it Drink it down and smoke it up
Strong enough to hold a grudge
Im a one man army you see me you know its "us"
Folded crutch, handicapped sick to get your granny smacked
Fannypacks, full of weed, higher than a landing pad
Damn im mad, santas dad damn im really gifted
Feeling like a new man as if i just existed
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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Just Silver » Jul 9th, '12, 20:04

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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Sam. » Jul 9th, '12, 21:55

The flow was the main attraction in this, the way you placed every rhymes was magnificent. It was like hoping from one rhyme to the another. Since this is a keystyle, I can ignore any criticism as far as the content is concerned. But it was okay, not bad.
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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Just Silver » Jul 9th, '12, 23:01

thanks i liked the flow alot on this one too
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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Just Silver » Jul 10th, '12, 20:51

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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Eedee » Jul 22nd, '12, 07:37

Damn this is slept on (sorry!).

This was awesome. Loved the rhymes and the way they made the piece flow, even without a beat, that's just DAMN. Was great from start to finish. Nice punchlines scattered throughout with some solid multis. Never seen you post before but start doing it more often! You're a good writer.
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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Just Silver » Jul 23rd, '12, 01:58

Eedee wrote:Damn this is slept on (sorry!).

This was awesome. Loved the rhymes and the way they made the piece flow, even without a beat, that's just DAMN. Was great from start to finish. Nice punchlines scattered throughout with some solid multis. Never seen you post before but start doing it more often! You're a good writer.

thanks guy appreciate it
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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Wreck » Jul 24th, '12, 00:43

The flow here, like Sam said, was excellent, I really enjoyed reading that w/ ease, & it fit perfectly, the vocab/multis were good too, as well as the concept. Overall, very nice piece here, keep it up :y:.
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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jul 25th, '12, 02:45

Damn son. I feel bad that I missed this. This was dopeness man. It seemed a bit average until the flow switched in the middle. But you nailed the faster flow. On a written that's tough to do, but you strung along a group of syllables and words that helped aid the flow and made it much easier to pick up a faster flow. I really liked this dude. If you would wanna collab sometime in the future hit me up, I haven't written in a while and with the competition coming up, I may not have time to write. But if you wanna set something up later in the future, I'm definitely down.
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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Just Silver » Jul 25th, '12, 05:09

Mr.DGAF wrote:Damn son. I feel bad that I missed this. This was dopeness man. It seemed a bit average until the flow switched in the middle. But you nailed the faster flow. On a written that's tough to do, but you strung along a group of syllables and words that helped aid the flow and made it much easier to pick up a faster flow. I really liked this dude. If you would wanna collab sometime in the future hit me up, I haven't written in a while and with the competition coming up, I may not have time to write. But if you wanna set something up later in the future, I'm definitely down.

Hell ya guy As soon as I get some type of Internet with a keyboard again .. Rough times lol thanks for the feed
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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Gummybur » Jul 25th, '12, 13:19

This is exactly what I strive to do.

If you don't mind me asking, how long have you been into rapping in general? There wasn't a moment I got lost while reading it. Each bar connected to the last and the next, it was fucking insane.
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Re: Toe Tag Keystyle

Postby Just Silver » Jul 26th, '12, 00:52

Gummybur wrote:This is exactly what I strive to do.

If you don't mind me asking, how long have you been into rapping in general? There wasn't a moment I got lost while reading it. Each bar connected to the last and the next, it was fucking insane.

I've been rapping freestyle for about 4 years and forum rapping 3 years
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