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Eedee - [2] Won't Stop

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Eedee - [2] Won't Stop

Postby Eedee » Jul 15th, '12, 01:39

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=146703&p=1939096#p1939096

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DnZTsjAO ... re=related

*This was merely a rhyming piece - there's no message/moral, so don't look too hard :p



(:10)
The stars start to fade every time I spit,
But hearts bark and shake, never liked my shit.
Pumping blood like a wet dog, so if you get my drift,
Something's up, find the best song to get you intimate.
Cuz you're close to death if you mess with me at all,
Fuck the host, at best, it's too clenched, it's free to fall.
Cuz the dream is being held too tight to keep it close,
But it seems with seeing Hell, you fight to feel its roast.
It's quite the climax when you're battling demons,
Big fights but like that, in for fathoming freedoms.
Having it eat him, it's like a torture chamber,
Grabbing the beacon, get by with normal anger.
Cuz the hulk won't do, they can blow right through,
But that book chose you, ain't it wrote like you?
What the pen describes is what's up inside your head,
Fucking rest your eyes and just pluck the rhymes instead.


(:52)
Oh hell naw boy, I won't stop,
Negative thoughts is something I don't got.
Oh hell naw boy, I won't stop,
I'm the best in the Cosmos with my hot flows.
And I stop yo, motherfuckers, I won't stop.
I won't stop... nah, I won't stop.
Won't stop........

(1:14)
Get a move on with it, I ain't saying it twice,
It's a true song bitches, why make waves if it's ice?
I'm cold-blooded, to the point of absolute zero,
I've told nothing of the voice that tags a true hero.
My powers go beyond this realm of time and space,
Five hours till the spawn, shit! Yell to find a place
To take cover, better run like the wind,
Who shakes smothered? Weather's done, time to sprint.
To the finish line, fuckers, but I'm miles ahead,
Through the winter time, pucker up like ice instead,
But I'm so cold everywhere when I stare you down,
"Sup guy? Go hold Teddy bears, but don't dare to frown!"
I'm intimidating, yes, but that's no excuse,
Not to rhyme because you know that's fucking bad for you, dude!
From single syllables to multis, to every fucking word,
Take a gander at this verse and tell me that nothing's heard.

(2:18)
You used a pencil to create a masterpiece?
Flip it over, prick and erase it faster, please.
Because actua-lly the only masterpiece,
Is the rapper Eedee, not your plastic beats.
This shit is raw, so I'ma do it till I get it all,
If rap had an office my face be on the "Winner Wall".
Ding ding ding, that was the dinner call,
Time to eat you fuckers up and lick my chops when I finish y'all.
I got my dick securely fashioned, won't grab my balls,
No need to act gangster cuz all I need is my savage jaw.
I roar like a lion, I got an eye of the tiger,
You got the brain of a fetus that's fucking dying inside her.
That's sick... I know, but what the hell, right?
I can picture One Million Moms running to come and yell twice.
There's no way in this world that I'ma stop now,
Find the fast lane and hit the CC with the top down!
Last edited by Eedee on Jul 19th, '12, 02:36, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Eedee - Won't Stop

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jul 15th, '12, 03:44

The full bars man...sheesh.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Eedee - Won't Stop

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jul 15th, '12, 18:14

Awesome rhyming dude this was great! I love the full line rhymes you kept it pretty consistent, lol pieces like this are some of my favorite! nice job.
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Re: Eedee - Won't Stop

Postby Lasers89 » Jul 16th, '12, 00:04

You used a pencil to create a masterpiece?
Flip it over, prick and erase it faster, please.
Because actua-lly the only masterpiece,
Is the rapper Eedee, not your plastic beats.


Dude, that rhyme scheme was ILL !!
Also that beat is pretty sick but wish it was a bit faster tempo wise.
All in all really nice writing, i can see it took a lot of thought.
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