Flashes (ft. Eedee) (Track 8)

[Mr.DGAF]

Second to last track for my EP that has been going for about 9 months or so haha. I will finish this ish.

DGAF feed: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=146703
Eedee feed: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=146703
Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fkTbNxvWzZQ


:20 (DGAF)
I tread in the state of limbo, conscious but I'm unaware
Bargaining with fate to end old problems but it doesn't care
Flashing back in utter fear to memories that never cease
Funny how the past relates in history to present themes
As a kid I rarely dreamed, guess I was too scared to sleep
Eternal dark without a light, no air to breathe nowhere it seems
A circumstance no parent sees, their child dies before themselves
The certain chance of terror leaves them wild eyed and short of breath
It's true there's no denying death, but still I feel like I've abandoned
Everyone that held me close, it took 'till now to try and handle
Numerous mistakes I've made, too bad I can't apologize
I never reached the lofty highs I could've in my father's eyes
Thoughts will leave me traumatized in coffins that I can't escape
The past has passed but still it crashes on me at a frantic pace
Flooded with old memories that haunt me even to my grave
Visions twenty twenty but I couldn't see my foolish ways
Only thing that I regret is feeling like regretting actions
Every choice I choose to make kept me from propelling backwards
Learning from the failure matters, never make the same mistake
Guess that's why I'm dying here, it lead me to this place today
Nowhere else to lay the blame, I chose this route and followed it
Hope is only part of living, hollow thoughts of sorrow live
And breed inside the weak but shit, I'm learning every second that
The lessons learned in life will only end once you're dead and passed

1:24 (Chorus x2)
Sitting on the brink of death, frightened as it fades to black
Memories that we forget enlightened as we play it back
Even though our fates have crashed we act as though we're fine
Live and learn, then relive and watch it flash before your eyes

(Verse 2 Eedee)
My life crackles and pops, the whole fucking stuff's burning,
But time tackles my happiness, so now I'm nothing but hurting.
Unswerving. And undeserving of this torment,
I've been riding down this tarmac almost wishing that I'd forget.
I've seen where the road leads, no wheels and no feet
Can venture further than the dead end yet still you hold me.
The rope is rough and this chair is the only,
Thing keeping me from swaying, I don't care cuz I'm lonely.
I jumping from a cliff but it's only two feet from the ground,
Which is funny because my two feet are never coming down.
As my airway's blocked, there is no fail safe watch,
To get me down from this tomb but now the dang pain stops.
I see my daddy waving bye-bye, a long distance high five,
I'll see him in three weeks, each cheek is like ice. Why?
I'm shutting down... my body's growing colder,
The years are sweeping by and I'm only growing older.
I blow out my birthday cake, I count the candles: seventeen,
I've blossomed into a young man like a forest of evergreens.
Lakers games and sleepovers, don't ask me why
I drift off from this existence that's just passing by.
I'm a crab in a bucket and now this Cancer cries,
"What is life?" is my question but the answer dies.
And I just can't decide if I wanna leave this life,
I better think quick if I wanna breathe tonight.

(Chorus x2)
Sitting on the brink of death, frightened as it fades to black
Memories that we forget enlightened as we play it back
Even though our fates have crashed we act as though we're fine
Live and learn, then relive and watch it flash before your eyes

3:08 (Verse 3 Eedee; DGAF)
The sound of my last breath, I can hear it clearly,
And Death is creeping up cold, I can feel him near me.
I let the tears flow freely, there's no fears but I'm scared,
That when I die I'll see something rather than nothing there.
Flickering from the glare of the gap between reality
Drifting towards the light as I pass the realm of gravity
I relive my past with speed and wonder what the future holds
Only Seventeen, never dreamed that I'd lose the hope
Which rope to use? It seems trivial at this point,
If God is the man, then I hope to see the big boys.
This boy is adamant, ain't having it, he's sad as shit,
Almost tempted to keep living just to see how bad it gets
If I had a wish it'd be to see the ones I love again
Tell them not to wonder if I'm happy, no more suffering
But I've missed the chance and now I live inside a world of "if's"
Misery will turn to bliss, I'm certain there's no curing this

[Eedee]

This was fun to do.

[Mr.DGAF]

This was fun to do.

Oh, Fa'sho mane.

[Sam.]

This was fun to read. Great job, duders.

DGAF takes the cake with his dope rhyming. I noticed that at places you [DGAF] rhymed full lines and sometimes you didn't. Am I right? It was good either way, so you need not worry. You were consistent in presenting your though, much clearer as compared to Ed.

Edee's verse seemed a little odd, feels wrongly phrased. It seems that you wrote down the multis 1st, then wrote around it. The way I read it, I didn't get what you were saying, had to read it again. Your 2nd verse with DGAF was dope, more meaningful and all.

[Mr.DGAF]

This was fun to read. Great job, duders.

DGAF takes the cake with his dope rhyming. I noticed that at places you [DGAF] rhymed full lines and sometimes you didn't. Am I right? It was good either way, so you need not worry. You were consistent in presenting your though, much clearer as compared to Ed.

Edee's verse seemed a little odd, feels wrongly phrased. It seems that you wrote down the multis 1st, then wrote around it. The way I read it, I didn't get what you were saying, had to read it again. Your 2nd verse with DGAF was dope, more meaningful and all.

Thanks man, yeah, I had some full bar rhyming, only on a couple occasions though haha. This piece was generally focused on the emotionz.

[Eedee]

Edee's verse seemed a little odd, feels wrongly phrased. It seems that you wrote down the multis 1st, then wrote around it. The way I read it, I didn't get what you were saying, had to read it again. Your 2nd verse with DGAF was dope, more meaningful and all.

Thanks for the review. And since this piece is emotion-based, it would make no sense for me to write the multis beforehand, then write around them. I started this thing from scratch...

And which parts seemed oddly worded or phrased? I'd like to know so I can tweak future pieces of this nature. Thanks.

[Sam.]

Edee's verse seemed a little odd, feels wrongly phrased. It seems that you wrote down the multis 1st, then wrote around it. The way I read it, I didn't get what you were saying, had to read it again. Your 2nd verse with DGAF was dope, more meaningful and all.

Thanks for the review. And since this piece is emotion-based, it would make no sense for me to write the multis beforehand, then write around them. I started this thing from scratch...

And which parts seemed oddly worded or phrased? I'd like to know so I can tweak future pieces of this nature. Thanks.

It seemed like it at times, like here: (Atleast for me)
My life crackles and pops, the whole fucking stuff's burning,
But time tackles my happiness, so now I'm nothing but hurting.

I jumping from a cliff but it's only two feet from the ground,
Which is funny because my two feet are never coming down.