Eedee - [8] Higher

[Eedee]

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=146594&p=1942766#p1942766

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tK-ce184 ... ure=relmfu

[Chorus] (:11)

[Verse 1] (:36)
You heard that shit? Nothing's gonna hold me back,
All the way from that first track, ain't never letting go of rap.
It's like my outlet, supports me when the ground splits,
It suits me like Barney Stinson, what is up?? Come here and pound fists.
When I was doing the hardest mission hip hop got my heart to listen,
But why did that rope get untied? It lit up the dark division.
Was dividing my mind into the bad and worse,
I've always been this angry and raged, was born mad at birth.
Life filled with tragic firsts, under a magic curse,
Now the scars I wear are only decoration like a faggot's purse.
Maybe they're declarations - that my skin is thick,
Pride is a fickle thing, look closely, shit is interesting.
I have my goals set, but I'm falling short,
All aboard the train of no breath like in a water board.
But now I pour sweat, gonna set this place on fire
Because now that I have that, this rap is gonna take me higher!

[Chorus] (1:27)

[Verse 2] (1:53)
It's time to face the music, literally, nod your head,
Those who sleep on me can get it cuz they're off to bed.
If the grass is really greener, then this shit is a turf war,
But that's comparing my guns to your silly little Nerf sport.
And baby you're mine to hold, you're like a mine of gold,
I'm fuckin' crazy as shit, where is a psycho ward?
Rap can be aggressive, it can let you vent,
You can talk to your love and reap the benefits.
So when I held a pen, you know it felt just right
Like the second Onslaught from Slaughter c'mon just "Get 'em high!"
Rap is versatile, it's unlimited,
You can talk about anything, "I love cinnamon!"
One of these days I'll get my face in the game,
And just do what I love, I feel greater this way.
I'm HazMat dangerous, set this place on fire,
Cuz now that I have that, this rap is gonna take me higher!

[Chorus] (2:43)

[Verse 3] (3:08)
Is it a drug or a rap? I feel like I'm in the clouds,
Is it a drum or a clap? I'm gonna win this now.
Doesn't matter either way if you get my drift,
I'm hotter than the baddest fever and I spit my gift.
But this ain't a gift, I mean I used to suck,
But with practice and practice, now I'm moving up.
I don't claim that I'm the best, fuckin' no way,
I go way back with the lyrics and now I flow straight.
Until this shit is said going through a mic,
The flow is up to you all you gotta do is try.
You can die if you want, or you can get up and live,
Rap helped me do the latter man, this stuff is real.
I'm sicker than incest, I'm doper than heroine,
Can't get me with this vest cuz it's harder than keratin.
Call me the Mid-West, I'll set this place on fire,
Cuz now that I have that, this rap is gonna take me higher!

[Chorus] (3:59)

[Sam.]

Fucking loved this one. Wonderfully written to the beat, flowed exceedingly well. Coming to the technical aspect, I find most of words rhymes just because of the beat that supplemented it, otherwise it's a stretch for me. Among them I found the following lines with some forced rhymes:

Maybe they're declarations - that my skin is thick,
Pride is a fickle thing, look closely, shit is interesting.

If the grass is really greener, then this shit is a turf war,
But that's comparing my guns to your silly little Nerf sport.

I don't claim that I'm the best, fuckin' no way,
I go way back with the lyrics and now I flow straight.

None the less, I like the content on this one. Keep it up,bro.

[Eedee]

Fucking loved this one. Wonderfully written to the beat, flowed exceedingly well. Coming to the technical aspect, I find most of words rhymes just because of the beat that supplemented it, otherwise it's a stretch for me. Among them I found the following lines with some forced rhymes:

Maybe they're declarations - that my skin is thick,
Pride is a fickle thing, look closely, shit is interesting.

If the grass is really greener, then this shit is a turf war,
But that's comparing my guns to your silly little Nerf sport.

I don't claim that I'm the best, fuckin' no way,
I go way back with the lyrics and now I flow straight.

None the less, I like the content on this one. Keep it up,bro.

Awesome, glad you enjoyed it!! And if I may, I'd like to point out some things you might not have noticed in those lines... because I don't think they're forced at all.

The first one: "skin is thick / fickle thing" = Inverse. "that my skin is thick / shit is in-tra-sting" (interesting). If I was to rap this, I would say "that" like "thit", barely noticeable, easily rhyming with "shit".

Second one: Just a wordplay on the greener grass/turf thing. And comparing my lyrical guns to yours makes yours look like the Nerf sport guns. Meh.

Third one:

I don't claim that I'm the best, fuckin' no way,
I go way back/go way with the lyrics and now I flow straight.

The only reason I'm "arguing" is because this one might possibly have been my favorite to write, ever. But nonetheless, I'm glad you liked it and thanks for the feed, dude.

[Sam.]

I missed the inverse in this verse, fuck, I got one in the last one that I fed. SO, it's all cool. Why are you pointing out the inners on the last one? I got that. I'm just saying that the ending has some forced rhymes, imho, bro. Peace.

[Eedee]

I missed the inverse in this verse, fuck, I got one in the last one that I fed. SO, it's all cool. Why are you pointing out the inners on the last one? I got that. I'm just saying that the ending has some forced rhymes, imho, bro. Peace.

Lol I don't even know. Sometimes when you read a piece you don't pick up on them since they're not part of the end rhyme scheme. But yeah. Thanks for the looks, dude. Appreciate it.