"One Last Time"

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In my absence from this site I wrote a TON of shit. I'll be posting them up every few days, to try and get more activity in here.

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This song was written to an 80 BPM instrumental.


V1:

pressure that is building in the chasm that she dug inside..
rather have another way to claim
that she was someone's liability..
stuck inside the guillotine ((Guillotine))..
smothering her days left,
with nothing but an illustrated cover of a paint set,
the colors.. they would play dead, stay wet..
hoping for the artist to come back so he can take them..
take them all away ((away))...
erase them from the pain...
take away the suffering that she would try to paint
inside the colored ink, (the pages of a bloody dream)
(SAVE ME!!!)..
I don't wanna go there... you, you can't make me..
saving all her energy to open up a single gift,
a single wrist, soaking up the blood..
the memories that she would never seek again..
maybe she's asleep..
sleep my little angel and I'll show you all your weaknesses
show you off and keep the kisses coming til we meet again,
innocent.. she had said...


HOOK:

The way we leave the world
it doesn't ever really matter much,
all that matters is the fact
that we don't ever have to love..
'love me' was a choice
you had chosen not to make..
my life was a chance
I, thought that I should take..
live this life again, you can
(live it to the end) ((the end))
plant another rose,
you can try to make ammends
live this life again,
you should live it to the end..
(love me x4)


V2:

in trying to decide what the flavoring of reason is
I'm cave diving dry in an attempt to find the meaningless
a tedious regret.. I'll pull it til its taut..
another lesson in mechanical
to lessen what the animal inside you might demand of you or not
an absolute.. I'm carving out emotion in the boulders
that are holding down your eyelids,
& I'd give the motive up to try this..
(I know it sucks)
a broken crown of hopeless over flowing blood
you notice what it's missing?..
give me every map &
I will go recover fragments of your chipped beak
and hand it to the lonely dove within me...
(show me love) by transfering your wings in to my back again
and burn me with the accidental friction you are handling,
concerning with my take off..
stay strong, nurture's always winning and..
nature got a tattoo, a mouth full of little hands
(Taste what you created).. She tasted and she hates it
I think I heard her say this..

HOOK:

The way we leave the world
it doesn't ever really matter much,
all that matters is the fact
that we don't ever have to love..
'love me' was a choice
you had chosen not to make..
my life was a chance
I, thought that I should take..
live this life again, you can
(live it to the end) ((the end))
plant another rose,
you can try to make ammends
live this life again,
you should live it to the end..
(love me x4)


BRIDGE:

cave diving dry..
chasm that she dug inside..
nurture's always winning..
maybe she's asleep..
fragments.. chipped beak,
(I don't wanna go there)..
lonely dove within me,
(I don't wanna go there)..
energy to open up,
single gift, flowing blood..
(I don't wanna go there)
give me every map..
the pages of a bloody dream..
colored ink, what a scene..
tattoo, little hands..
tasted and she hates it..


HOOK:

The way we leave the world
it doesn't ever really matter much,
all that matters is the fact
that we don't ever have to love..
'love me' was a choice
you had chosen not to make..
my life was a chance
I, thought that I should take..
live this life again, you can
(live it to the end) ((the end))
plant another rose,
you can try to make ammends
live this life again,
you should live it to the end..
(love me x4)

[Mr.DGAF]

Damn man. I've read your previous works here before, I know you're a skilled writer. This was one of the easiest flows I've picked up on this site. The rhymes flowed perfectly, nothing was forced. To me your pieces have a sort of poetic feel to them, in how the words are presented. The message was pretty nice, but the execution was top-notch. This is good man, it'll be nice to see some pieces up from you soon.

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Thanks for the feed, man. I really appriciate it.

[Eedee]

I liked this, dude. As DGAF said, it felt poetic. Flow was nice as well. The hook was very beautiful, hit home, ya know? Never seen you post before, but jeesh, do it more often!

[Sam.]

Very reminiscent to Eyedea's Smile. Is it true? I could be wrong.

[Doodlebug]

I like these lines:

with nothing but an illustrated cover of a paint set,
the colors.. they would play dead, stay wet..

really unique thought.

[Block]

Very reminiscent to Eyedea's Smile. Is it true? I could be wrong.

Good fucking eye, dude . Not that song, in particular, but rather the entire By The Throat album. I wrote this song after listening to that album for like 3 days straight, lol.


@doodle - Thanks bro. I'm happy you enjoyed it.

[Sam.]

Very reminiscent to Eyedea's Smile. Is it true? I could be wrong.

Good fucking eye, dude . Not that song, in particular, but rather the entire By The Throat album. I wrote this song after listening to that album for like 3 days straight, lol.

At first I though you were being sarcastic, but it's all good. I recognize the influences when I see one. Believe me, I really read it with that song in my mind. Knowing how the Album was written; I could relate to your words well. Good looks.

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Very reminiscent to Eyedea's Smile. Is it true? I could be wrong.

Good fucking eye, dude . Not that song, in particular, but rather the entire By The Throat album. I wrote this song after listening to that album for like 3 days straight, lol.

At first I though you were being sarcastic, but it's all good. I recognize the influences when I see one. Believe me, I really read it with that song in my mind. Knowing how the Album was written; I could relate to your words well. Good looks.

Haha, not at all my man. I was genuinely impressed that you spotted that through just the writing. Thanks again bro.

@hesky - oh... I didn't know, haha. My bad.