Of Mice And Men.

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This is only one verse.


seething at the roots seats a bleeding heart liberal,
conservative in the way they lead you to the noose
with a fishing pole, hook you in, believing what is true
what is true?
did we bait you with success or did you follow in succession?
were you just another swallow losing feathers?
better yet.. had I mentioned all our grievences
would you be there to leave us with a taste less bitter than the last (than the last)
the last drip of foldgers when the grounds are in the mug...
a tactic that would hold you to the sound you're giving up, (does it pass?)
someone answer me a question...
if you write it in the form of a statement or a blessing,
a faceless intervention from the past (what is that?).
sitting on the stoupe between your 12 step and dragontales,
you felt less than half the male you used to be,
when half the mail was eulogies for crash and failing beautifully,
a fever in the dark, we're the meter when you park,
you can pay me just for staying alive.. that's degrading
but you made it, so you thank me with a blade in my thigh...
I'm your savior....

[Eedee]

I couldn't find a flow because of the way you structured your bars... It was awkward.

However, the rhymes were nice when I found them. The content was interesting, especially towards the ending. Pretty decent verse except for the flow for such a short drop.

[Sam.]

It's very complicated. I'm reading it over and over to get it. It is getting clearer with every read. I'll post a proper feed once I understand it fully.

[gutawafang]

I thought you were promoting the band cuz I do listen to Of Mice and Men.

Nehmind that. Your vocab is pretty good but it's sorta hard to pronounce in raps. But it's really poetic. Thumbs up.