2006 Freestyle

[Atone]

in 2006, a local radio station wanted to interview ppl from my senior class, it was gonna be 2 or 3 people on the radio, and somebody had the idea to invite me to go with, cuz they wanted me to rap on the radio, as a joke cuz they wanted me to embarass myself, and i took that as a way for me to prove them wrong, i even wrote somethin for it, but in the end the school wouldn't let me go with cuz they wanted to choose 3 people with the highest GPA, anyways, here's what i wrote

(Verse)
Ok check it, for me it's hard to be respected
but if you let me rhyme i bet i leave ya breathless
like you just seen a shiny diamond neckless
cuz i'm sick in the head, my rhymes are wreckless
and i really don;t care if i'm ever accepted
i know you guys probably think i'm crazy
and maybe i am, cuz y'all push me daily
but i'm not as weird as you think baby
hey lady, you thought it would be cool to put me on the radi-
Oh to go and make myself look like a fool
ok cool but how about i turn it around and embarass the school
embarass you tool's, cuz you wanna ruin what i call dreams
but i got more talent than the entire football team
a whole season and y'all aint won a single game
that don't mean you need practice it means your lame
and the vollyball team is a fail, a bunch of fatty's
who run around drivin caddi's bought by your daddy
stuck up, cuz your luck's up,
and i bet y'all probably want me to shut up
cuz you wanted me to come on here and be a ---
nah i aint gonna cuss, just bust a couple
cuz you want me to fail but i had to bust ya bubble


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[Eedee]

You're right. You would've been embarrassed. Not by the rhymes or anything, those were decent, but the sheer fact you'd never be able to pull of a respectable flow with this. I take it there's not beat to work with here, it was going to be an acapella freestyle? Yeah.... not so much. You'd be all over the place.

Oh, the "baby/crazy/lady" rhyme scheme w/o having any other syllables to lengthen it:

[RainMan44]

I actually liked the flip you did. I also enjoyed the verse. And I think you can pull it off if you acapella'd it with a vicious/grimey tone in your voice. Good shit bro, there were nice multies here and there. If I were you I'd go over it with a beat and perform surgery on it, just get it to where it's a nice flowing song...and from there, maybe you can make a concept album or something one day where it's based on a character, and you can put this on there...prob coming after a skit where they set you up..then you flip it on 'em. lol

good stuff man!

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