City of Dreams (TRshady Summer Tape - Track 4)

[SG.]

LOF: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=147875&p=1974965#p1974965
Beat: Royce da 5'9" - Shake This

[Verse]

I was surrounded by gorillas on Melancholy Hill
Let's be honest, those guys would never call me ill
The fact is, I've been focusing on my calculus
Me getting famous? Ha, that'd be miraculous
Which is why I came here, the city of dreams
This is the way I wanted to live my teens
My father's here, resurrected after two years
Slug it out after we wipe away a few tears
Maybe my consciousness knows, but I'll ignore it
Slowly I'm trying to remember what went on before this
But then I see my fuckin' idols shaking my hand
They start conspiring like they making a plan
Then they said "look at your stomach", lot of bleeding
So if this really is the afterlife, I'm not leaving
Maybe this is why this place will stay a dream
My life is a movie, I'm playing the end theme

[Chorus]

Welcome to the City of Dreams
Life can fall apart right at the seams
So we live our goals, we were born to die
Joining Biggie and Pac after we say goodbye

[Outro]

The implication that death is the end is a fallacy. Studies have shown that life continues after death, directly or indirectly. The question is not whether you believe in the afterlife or if you believe in a god. It is this: do you believe in the city of dreams?

[Eedee]

Which is why I came here, the city of dreams
This is the way I wanted to live my teens

I feel you could've said:

"... living my teens"; the multi would have the proper amount of syllables... That line felt so off to me.

This was interesting though. You pulled off some great multies and ideas for us.
IMO, a TRShady Tape track should have a full song, not just one verse, but it's whatever dude.