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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby Blu » Sep 3rd, '12, 04:09

Okay tbh, I only clicked this to see Zell's verse.

He brought some fire.

That is all.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 3rd, '12, 04:11

I figured haha, the dude knows how to draw some attention. I'ma start spazzing before tracks now haha.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby Eedee » Sep 3rd, '12, 04:18

DGAF brought it hard with the rhymes, great flow, great imagery. Definitely up to your standards, pimp. Nothing else to say really. You had some great multies, for sure.

So we're heading to a cabin in the middle of the woods
Feel a little shook, act as if it's simple if I could


Great flow/multies to open the track.

Geno continued DGAF's thought process perfectly. Excellent flow throughout the entire verse. I enjoyed it.

Zell definitely exceeded my expectations, being the little cocky fuck that he is lol. But he did indeed bring fire, as Blu said. Some great schemes in there.

With that said, however, I feel DGAF had the best verse, IMO.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 3rd, '12, 04:52

Thanks for the feed guys, it was definitely a good track.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby Blu » Sep 3rd, '12, 04:54

I need to hear you guys in audio soon.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 3rd, '12, 05:06

Haha I dropped an audio piece but it was not great considering the circumstances haha. Recorded on a phone in an abandoned house without the beat. I might wait for more ideal surroundings before I take another crack at it.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 3rd, '12, 07:43

This shit was overall sick. Everyone did awesome, I think Geno's verse flowed very smooth. And the lyricism was there as always. Everyone came with the impressive multies and punches.

@Mr. DGAF, this was different from your usual shit, and i like it. Or maybe because I haven't been on here for a while, I missed a lot of pieces. But you've manage to switch it up and still write a dope verse yet again, nice shit man keep it up :y:

@Zellomugi idk if i've ever peeped any of your previous pieces, but this was very well written. good stuff bro :b:

the track overall was solid. nice concept too :smoking:




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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Sep 4th, '12, 03:54

Lol like everyone else I came to see Zellos verse haha! He killed it and so did everyone else! I loved the topic great job you guys this was a really interesting piece!
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby J.R. » Sep 4th, '12, 22:07

That kid brought fire. But he's still a cocky arse.

Fav. verse was DGAF.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby Atone » Sep 7th, '12, 03:47

fucking sick story, i litterally imaged this in my head as if it was a video

don't know who Zellomugi is but dude had the best verse

it was more like you all tied for best verse, Geno's part, made me think of Rob Zombie style like horror film,

idk, maybe my imagination made this epic as fuck but everybdy's lyrics really created the scenes.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Sep 8th, '12, 19:12

Very visual piece! Good work to all of you. Mr. DGAF took this one, but Zellomugi was more professional and intricate on his verse. Geno, your verse was not far behind--it was well put together, but I think it got overshadowed because the other two had longer verses than you.

Overall, I think you guys should've done more with the story. It just felt stagnant after a while. The 3 verses seemed to be talking about the same thing, but with different words..nah mean? Good work nonetheless.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby Slim Fiasco » Sep 8th, '12, 22:19

That was a dope read guys, excuse me for not going more in-depth but I'm kinda busy. But even if my words aren't enough, I paid my dues with thoughts when reading that.
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Re: Geno ft. Zellomugi & Mr. DGAF - Cabin Fever

Postby Enimee » Sep 10th, '12, 21:28

yalll went in on this, i really liked the scene the imagery, the sequence of events and your schemes,

at the end of your verses you guys all fell out a little bit lyrically though, it lost its fluidity in my opinion
but otherwise it was basically perfect and on point
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