Don't Give A Fuck

[Atone]

Basically, this started off as a very longggg freestyle, i split it into 2 verses tho, it would have been longer cuz i had like an extra 24 bars dissing a cop, 6 of my old teachers, and a bunch of kids i went to school with but decided to take that part out and not go at anybody in particular in this.

(Verse)
Now first of all
before i go off the wall
i gotta couple shots to call
about a few awful----awwww
At first i was gonna bust shots
and diss a mother fucker but nevermind i forgot who
and if you mad at me don't worry it's not you
his name is lame he's garbage as an artist
and i aim these flames to target you all the hardest
and hit you in the nuts bitch, fuck this, i'm takin control
and breakin some skulls for makin my head ache and wakin the troll--
it's to late to be bold mother fucker you fakes are so cold
while i come hot with the drops to pop in the spot
i'm not gonna stop and just rot i'm plottin to rock
so, hate on me and leave me behind
but go look in the mirror and say my name 3 times
turn the lights on, oh that's right you can't
your embarassed cuz you wet your pants
when you heard my tunes it was like a trance
i made you wanna dance
and now your hidin and your cryin
actin like your dyin
you say i'm wack but your lyin
cuz you know you play my music when your all alone
jackin off to backstreet boys with your hello kitty phone
on your power puff blanket and your barney boom box
you faggots only pretend you don't like me
but if i was on mtv you would write me
it makes me laugh, and honestly you can bite me

(Hook)
I Just---don't give a fuck
i bust---to live it up
so just---come lick my nuts
cuz i, just don't give a fuck

(Verse)
so hit your cess and rhyme
about how your next in line
but your just a waste of time
so let me just crack your face and spine
rip your fuckin head off and spit a loogy down your throat
that's how i make it rain man, that's all she wrote
you awful jokes, i bet some of you purposouly drop the soap
screamin PAPA, you faggots go hop a rope
while you feed pieces and tell your buddy's THAT'S AWESOME DOPE
GREAT LINES, I LOVE THE WAY YOU MAKE RHYMES
WE THINK ALIKE, WERE GREAT MINDS
and suck each other's cocks, great times
while i sit back and spit raps to sick tracks
and rip fags like french cigerret packs
yeah i think i'll stick to that
and murder that sixteen you bust so lame
swear to god i'll smack you the fuck up before i drop outta the game
i'll make it drastic, i'll take you rappers and wrap you faggots like christmas plastic
you limp dick has beens, i'm makin classics
better check your ego at the door before we go anymore
cuz i set these toes on the floor and we trade blows and settle the score
way better than before, i held that shit myself
i'm bad with a hint of evil so welcome to hell

(Hook)

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[tadpole25]

very good job with the multis, but the syllables from bar to bar are not even. maybe the lines with more syllables are rapped faster than the ones with less, but overall pretty good.

[Eedee]

Lol that was corny as hell.

First off, where's the name drops? If you're gonna diss someone, go full at it.
Secondly, "hello kitty phone"? That's not how you diss someone.

The rhymes were okay, some multies here and there but for the most part, wasn't that good. If you're going to diss someone, make sure you have good rhymes, good flow and whatnot or else they'll just flip that and make you seem weak.

As I seem to be saying more and more to your recent drops... not your best work.

[Atone]

No name drops because i purpously made this to SEEM like a diss when really it wasn't,

[Eedee]

No name drops because i purpously made this to SEEM like a diss when really it wasn't,

Right...

[Atone]

Truth is when i was typing it, i was stressed from alot of shit, and started out randomly throwin what looks like as disses, there was like 24 bars where i dissed half the people i went to school with but because those bars were way more personal i took them out.

this entire thing is basically me venting at just anybody, if somebody thinks it's a shot at them then i'll let em take it that way but i have no beef with anybody here.

[J.R.]

Decent multis. Kinda corny. But I kinda liked it. Flow was tough at times, but you kept it going. Work on it mane.

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[EvryOnesACrtc]

You have improved a lot. Good work, man. It doesn't bother me too much that you didn't call anyone out, but I think it woulda been more badass had you done so. Oh, well. Also, I wasn't even trying to make it flow when reading it and it still flowed well for me haa nice word placement. Keep elevatin'