Eedee - This Is Who I Am (Featuring Atone)

[Atone]

Eedee
Atone

(Chorus)(Eedee)
I'm just livin my life the best way i can
won't let anything stop me, i hope you understand
i can't let go of my dreams, this is who i am

(Verse)(Eedee)
Bend me, fold me... Empty, lonely.
I kept the only thing in my life that showed me
That the road I'm walking is a goal by talking,
Standing still but rapping will still be my only option.
I'm staring at the ceiling in bed and I haven't slept,
It's about as tragic as tragic gets...
I get up to the desk, reach and grab my pen,
As I start jotting my thoughts, I dream and fathom death.
I can see the stars through the rooftop...
I seize the dark for any truth but you stop
Any and all contact, I'm losing my discipline,
Shooting for wins again I'm using an interesting
Way to tell you that I'm sick of this...
Fuck you, you frickin' bitch, your shit is meticulous.
I'll write in my next life, you might beat me next time,
Dear, meet headlights, I've finally reached my dead-line.

(Chorus)(Atone)

(Verse)(Atone)
Fire in my eye's, Ambition in my heart
desire never dies, so listen for the spark
i'm livin for this art, inspired to just fly
i'm slippin from the dark, reachin for the sky
it's the reason i'm so high, as i inhale the passion
heart beats for the dreams as i scale the tracks and
it never fails tol happen, i spark heat it seem's
when i spark deeper meanings to flare my rap's and
i air these classics, so you keep on askin
and i answer with skill, as i slip in the zone
like cancer i'm ill, i'm sick in the dome
i flip in the tone, some say i can't so i will
i give em the bone, and i hand you my will
cuz if i die tonight i wanna leave behind a memory
for you to remember me as somebody who wrote
music that could center me, just somethin to cope
somethin so dope that some of you may render me
as one of the GOATS, so by the end you see


(Chorus)(Atone)
(Chorus Repeat)(Eedee)

Eeedee LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=148126&p=1981063#p1981063
Atone LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=148078

[Eedee]

Shouldn't this be:

Atone - This Is Who I Am (ft. Eedee)

instead since you PMd me with it? Lol it's whatever, really.

[J.R.]

Eedee took this. Overall you both did well.

Atone your verse was a major improvement man, but you did something that kinda pisses me off when I listen to an artist like Jay-Z.. He doesn't rhyme on some lines at all. That's.. Bad. Don't do that. But I still liked the piece

[Atone]

Shouldn't this be:

Atone - This Is Who I Am (ft. Eedee)

instead since you PMd me with it? Lol it's whatever, really.

io put you 1st cuz i feel like you had the best verse, so you starting off would interest people to read more to see where it's going, idk, my mind works in weird ways when i'm in writing mode, i get hundreds of idea's at once lol