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What's Beef (Mentioning Eedee & Geno)

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What's Beef (Mentioning Eedee & Geno)

Postby Atone » Sep 21st, '12, 04:03

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What's Beef?
Beef is when you take shit seriously
your delerious i'm curious if your hearin me
if you can't laugh at it you must have a fear of me
takin it personal when personally
my verse only speaks for me when i burst homie
people blew up like i was out killin an eagle
i never had any beef with you - chill with ya ego,
Eedee & Geno, there, see, so- now it aint subliminal
this aint a call out, so bring the heat to a minimal
only people i got beef with aint on the web
fuck a caps lock war, i take it to their head
let it be said, let it get done, so let it be known we just havin some fun
so leave it alone, cuz this is just dumb
beefin over a keyboard is the equivalent of tryin to sex up a nun
you ain't doin shit but talkin, so get back to what you do best
Eedee you got skill, Geno you to fresh
J.R's my homie, we off to see what we can do next

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Re: What's Beef (Mentioning Eedee & Geno)

Postby J.R. » Sep 21st, '12, 14:08

Thanks. But I'll be off to SL since this and backstage are about the only sections besides HHD I was in. And now everyone's on my ass here. So I'll put in the work for the EP but I won't be posting.

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Re: What's Beef (Mentioning Eedee & Geno)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 22nd, '12, 00:41

I thought the flow for the first two lines were awesome. I feel like sometimes you sacrifice the flow for the multies, there's a couple syllables I'd leave out for a few lines that would make the flow better for me. But I'm sure there was a particular flow you had in mind that I just didn't catch.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: What's Beef (Mentioning Eedee & Geno)

Postby Atone » Sep 22nd, '12, 07:11

idk man, i been listening to old school Jay-Z for 2 days, even tho i have this awful brain zap headache goin on for about 3 days straight now, it's not a nbormal headache, it feels like every 30 seconds somebody is stabbing me in the skull, i think it's cause i have a flu comin on,

anyways enough about that, yeah alot of times i go for multies, i'm stuck in that mode of writing recently
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