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The Wizard (Emulation Games Day 1)

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The Wizard (Emulation Games Day 1)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Oct 3rd, '12, 08:24

Here's my version of Inspectah Deck's verse in Protect Ya Neck:

You choke on the mic like a chokin' B. Rabbit
It's an ill habit, how Slim makes you go weak at it
Energize the pen like a Sith Lord's lightening
Rhyming for the crown, my sound is so frightening
So uhh, deep throat, girl, keep sucking it
I know it feels good cause you fucking love a dick
A strong need, code green - weed!
Stoned in the park, with the art to bone chicks in the dark
The Joker, too skilled for poker
You rap, but you sound worse than a croaker
Blue balls, Slim trolls with the flows
The wizard, got mighty words cold as a blizzard

*The original verse:

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I smoke on the mic like smokin' Joe Frazier
The hell-raiser, raising hell with the flavor
Terrorize the jam like troops in Pakistan
Swinging through your town like your neighborhood Spiderman
So uhh, tick tock keep ticking
While I get you flipping off the shit I'm kicking
The Lone Ranger, code red: danger!
Deep in the dark with the art to rip the charts apart
The vandal, too hot to handle
You battle, you're saying goodbye like Tevin Campbell
Roughneck, Inspectah Deck's on the set
The rebel, I make more noise than heavy metal
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Re: The Wizard (Emulation Games Day 1)

Postby Eedee » Oct 3rd, '12, 08:31

You had a few multis in there, nothing too great though.

It was a cool emulation, to be honest. I liked the way you talked about Rabbit and the Joker. Good first drop for these Games. I'm looking forward to everyone else's.
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Re: The Wizard (Emulation Games Day 1)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Oct 3rd, '12, 08:37

Eedee wrote:You had a few multis in there, nothing too great though.

It was a cool emulation, to be honest. I liked the way you talked about Rabbit and the Joker. Good first drop for these Games. I'm looking forward to everyone else's.


You can blame it on Inspectah Deck, lol, jk. THanks for the feedback though :y:
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Re: The Wizard (Emulation Games Day 1)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Oct 3rd, '12, 17:50

InsaneTRex94 wrote:You mentioned the Sith lightning, you win automatically.

lol this was cool, I liked it. It was a fun read. Dunno how to expand beyond that for an emulation lol. You didn't fuck it up? Is that good?


Haha, yeah bro, that's good, thanks. This game is more about having fun than about showing some more serious skills.
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Re: The Wizard (Emulation Games Day 1)

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Oct 3rd, '12, 18:09

Oh man slim that was great, mine is nothing compared to your's not sure if I still want to submit mine :unsure:
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Re: The Wizard (Emulation Games Day 1)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Oct 3rd, '12, 18:25

PAINKILLƎR wrote:Oh man slim that was great, mine is nothing compared to your's not sure if I still want to submit mine :unsure:


Please do man, I'm sure it's great just by being yours, and it's not like we have a lot of freedom given the limited rhyme scheme. And thanks :D :b:
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Re: The Wizard (Emulation Games Day 1)

Postby CrashBand » Oct 4th, '12, 00:48

I quite like how you changed the rhyme schemes and content. Nice approach
I'm not tryin to be rude, but I sincerely wanna fuck the taste out of your mouth
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Re: The Wizard (Emulation Games Day 1)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Oct 4th, '12, 08:45

THanks for the feedback guys!
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