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Geno - The Hell Raiser (Emulation Day 1)

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Re: Geno - The Hell Raiser (Emulation Day 1)

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Oct 3rd, '12, 19:38

Man Geno that was great, you guys are pros at this, I'm probably gonna lose in the first round :'(
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Re: Geno - The Hell Raiser (Emulation Day 1)

Postby Eedee » Oct 3rd, '12, 20:01

Hehe I see you did what I did and emulated every rhyme scheme. Good shit man.

To the next one!!!
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Re: Geno - The Hell Raiser (Emulation Day 1)

Postby CrashBand » Oct 4th, '12, 00:49

This was impressive just like Eedee's. Will probably try this approach next time round.
I'm not tryin to be rude, but I sincerely wanna fuck the taste out of your mouth
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Re: Geno - The Hell Raiser (Emulation Day 1)

Postby Just Silver » Oct 6th, '12, 16:34

I enjoyed the "original" lines more than the revised ones

"Terrorize the jam like troops in Pakistan
Swinging through your town like your neighborhood Spiderman"
i liked that line for some reason the spiderman part stuck out to me

Overall i liked it 7/10 some lines i couldnt understand like Tevin's line but i cant judge those parts
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Re: Geno - The Hell Raiser (Emulation Day 1)

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Oct 6th, '12, 20:08

^lmao I think you're getting the revised version confused with the original.

Anyway, this was nicee. You did a great job at rhyming each and every word. It was very similar to mine in that respect. It was completely different subject matter though. Overall, it was like a better version of the original--a new age version of it if you will. On to the next one!
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