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Provoking A Fight (Emulation 1)

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Provoking A Fight (Emulation 1)

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Oct 5th, '12, 04:29

I know I'm a little late, but I wasn't planning on taking part in this...it just looks like so much fun though! :D I tried rhyming it word for word. Let me know how I did!

Original:
I smoke on the mic like smokin' Joe Frazier
The hell-raiser, raising hell with the flavor
Terrorize the jam like troops in Pakistan
Swinging through your town like your neighborhood Spiderman
So uhh, tick tock keep ticking
While I get you flipping off the shit I'm kicking
The Lone Ranger, code red: danger!
Deep in the dark with the art to rip the charts apart
The vandal, too hot to handle
You battle, you're saying goodbye like Tevin Campbell
Roughneck, Inspectah Deck's on the set
The rebel, I make more noise than heavy metal


My Version:
Provoking a fight, I comatose haters
A bell waiter, made me swell from my anger
I paralyzed the man---he pooped his khaki pants
Bring me food right now 'fore I disable your diaphragm!!
"OH, ughh!"...Hip hop beat mixing
while I kick you victims off the bridge I'm fixing
Unknown stranger, rope-less strangler
I creep in the park when it's hard to get your car to start
The landfill, you're dropped in manholes
Who tattles, is praying to die to heaven's angels
Upset, I get obsessive with death
The Devil..says, "Make your choice, it's detrimental!!"




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Re: Provoking A Fight (Emulation 1)

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Oct 5th, '12, 19:36

InsaneTRex94 wrote:You rhymed almost everything, that in itself is fucking crazy. Probably one of my favorite round 1 pieces.


Ha, thanks man. I'm not even gonna front, that took me a lot of brain power to do lol
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Re: Provoking A Fight (Emulation 1)

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Oct 6th, '12, 03:28

Geno wrote:Dope as hell man. Good stuff.


Thanks for checking it out. I'll be sure to return the favor. For anyone else that might've liked this, but was too shy to say so lol check out mine and RainMan44's new collab, 'Fuck A Hook', that barely got any feedback:

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