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A Long Way Home..

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A Long Way Home..

Postby Doodlebug » Nov 11th, '12, 15:22

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=148450&p=2034606#p2034606

I was reading this: viewtopic.php?f=1&t=97715

One night my ex fell asleep on my patio. He was pretty drunk and my guess was the realization of what he had lost through his addictions was slowly seeping in. I looked past my emotions and tried to capture what I felt his were. He has since, moved on - and I am not sure to where. But I hope that peace finds him.


A Long Way Home...


I sigh...
The world around me is not recognizable
Somewhere I have gotten lost
Somewhere I have fallen from the path...


I see...
The people around me have all gone on
Their lives have moved foward
I've played no part in their memories....


The pain...
So hard to face the truths of my every day
Knowing that somehow it all went so very wrong
Realizing that mending my life, my heart, my soul
.... will take all that I have


I remember...
The way that it used to be..
Ups and downs, smiles and tears
I once thought I wanted to run from that
But now I realize, I want to run back


Its a long way home....
From where I am now
Not sure if I can do it
Not sure if I can stay




I smile...
At the memories of what used to be
Wishing for an opportunity to do it again
Pretend some things had never happened
But knowing ... life just does not work that way


I walk forward...
Deciding to begin my life again
Renew the love, the friendships, the familiar
Stepping back into the life I once eluded


I tremble...
Emotions flooding over me
Not sure if I can go back
Not sure if I am wanted



I pause...
So afraid to take the step forward
So afraid to stay in place
Knowing... its a long way home...


Deb... 07/08
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We are the children of pain.... educated by hurt..." - Deb
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Re: A Long Way Home..

Postby Wreck » Nov 22nd, '12, 06:46

This was really nice, didn't rhyme but it was a great piece, very emotional and conveyed your thoughts & emotions here, I thoroughly enjoyed it. It reminded me of a short Linkin Park type of song. Nice work.
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Re: A Long Way Home..

Postby Atone » Nov 22nd, '12, 12:24

none of this rhymed but it's good for a poem, not all poetry rhymes nor does it have to, as long as in makes sense to you and the reader IF the reader is smart enough to catch on to what the poet is trying to say.

And this is a very well written story as well,
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Re: A Long Way Home..

Postby Wreck » Nov 22nd, '12, 21:19

Atone wrote:none of this rhymed but it's good for a poem, not all poetry rhymes nor does it have to, as long as in makes sense to you and the reader IF the reader is smart enough to catch on to what the poet is trying to say.

And this is a very well written story as well,


I agree, I considered it to be more so a poem than a song.

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Re: A Long Way Home..

Postby Doodlebug » Nov 25th, '12, 17:03

Wreck wrote:
Atone wrote:none of this rhymed but it's good for a poem, not all poetry rhymes nor does it have to, as long as in makes sense to you and the reader IF the reader is smart enough to catch on to what the poet is trying to say.

And this is a very well written story as well,


I agree, I considered it to be more so a poem than a song.

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It is.. I just wanted to share it because one of the other articles talked about addiction.

My verse is about addiction from the stand point of the addict that does not feel they can go back, like where I said "I've played no part in their memories".

I have taken a hard slant against pot and drugs but I think that I do so because I"m angry and need something to .. hate... to blame.

I still see the person my ex and my parents used to be... and try now to hold onto those memories instead of the other ones...
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