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Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby ChristinaE12 » Dec 22nd, '12, 03:03

So, I was going through my profile/messages and forgot I wrote this for a 'collab' over a year ago that was never released.

I'm just going to post it for the hell of it at this point. Seeing as this place is dead anyways. I think I will try and write something else though and see how it compares. Haha.

I came with the "Ego" to subjugate any opponent
we know we own the skills to suffocate emcee's, the throne, and
the mic. You still dislike flooding hate? - then we condone it.
You all huffing paint if you think I ain't edgy the moment
my words hit.. They as potent as your heroin, you dope fiend whore.
What?? This is Hell's Cage..You think I come bearing gifts you hoping for
a 12 gauge from the drawer, I swear it has a scope and more.
A spell of rage to leave your skin wearing thin and clothing torn
What you moaning for? All I've been is..left with a blackened heart,
Why do you think I'm attacking the art.. Never slacking to start.
if practicing hard makes perfect.. then it.. I'm smashing apart.
I'll do whatever it takes to be surpassing the smart-est
(Artists) and your lookin at the three hardest lyrical assassins.
And we happen to be here puttin miracle's in action
I aint askin, you best listen cause we're fickle and packin
the most feared rhymes and flows known, so hear this..it's everlasting..

**EDITED** Forgot LOF.

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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby Eedee » Dec 22nd, '12, 05:48

Oh shit, this is dope. Loved the rhyme schemes!
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby Eedee » Dec 22nd, '12, 05:52

When did you write this, Geno?

Btw - both killed it.
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Dec 22nd, '12, 05:54

Damn, both of you kicked ass :worship:
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby Eedee » Dec 22nd, '12, 06:01

Geno wrote:Like over a year ago lol


Oh... wack.
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Dec 22nd, '12, 06:03

Eedee wrote:
Geno wrote:Like over a year ago lol


Oh... wack.

Jealous... :shifty:
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby Eedee » Dec 22nd, '12, 06:16

Yeah you're way better now.
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Dec 22nd, '12, 06:28

smh, I can't even write that good. I'm doomed.
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby Eedee » Dec 22nd, '12, 06:34

PAINKILLƎR wrote:smh, I can't even write that good. I'm doomed.


well*

And yes, you're doomed.
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Dec 22nd, '12, 06:39

Eedee wrote:
PAINKILLƎR wrote:smh, I can't even write that good. I'm doomed.


well*

And yes, you're doomed.

How dare you correct my grammar.
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby Eedee » Dec 22nd, '12, 07:05

PAINKILLƎR wrote:
Eedee wrote:
PAINKILLƎR wrote:smh, I can't even write that good. I'm doomed.


well*

And yes, you're doomed.

How dare you correct my grammar.


Oh shit, I'm sorry. :(
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby Sam. » Dec 22nd, '12, 19:56

I'll just feed the OP's verse.

I don't know what others are so hyped about, but, sorry to say, I'm not happy the way this shaped up. The rhymes were good and many in number but very inconsistent in placement. You used internal rhymes way too much than necessary, that actually sways away the time spent spitting the syllables in that bar. There's a domino effect originating from this. The flow was no were near to perfection' infact there was none at times.

I'm not saying that this is a shitty verse, but it's more like a raw diamond that has sharp edges that needs to taken care of to make it worth selling. I mean polish your shit. You know the basic concept, practice more.
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby Sam. » Dec 22nd, '12, 20:20

Geno wrote:Lol Sam you sound like you've read the dictionary trying to sound smart or something.

Her verse has a good flow, it's just difficult to interpret through text. We wrote it to a beat.

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To be smart in front of you? Who would I try to do that, what a waste of time that would be.

If only she had posted that beat, my feed would have followed suit. Did she? She didn't. So I'm gonna feed what I see. If she's has a problem with that, let her speak, Swifty.
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby ChristinaE12 » Dec 22nd, '12, 20:39

Lol its all good. Thanks for replying. And I forgot to post the beat too oh well. This is from over a year ago..so.
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Re: Year Anniversary..Just 16.

Postby Sam. » Dec 22nd, '12, 20:40

ChristinaE12 wrote:Lol its all good. Thanks for replying. And I forgot to post the beat too oh well. This is from over a year ago..so.

I'm curious to see your progress. Got any new shit? :)
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