Bigray x DGAF x Eedee x CP x Silver x Geno x Spyder - Cypher

[Just Silver]

lol two boston bomb punches but yea good shit here i liked it as a whole

[Spyder]

Geno eedee and cp all talked about the Boston bomber lawl

Was good shit though. I liked eedee's hash tag punch. I liked all of CP's verse.
And I thought ray had a nice verse where everything was coherent and didn't say things just to rhyme

[Just Silver]

thanks for the feed technically lol but yea i shouldve uped the punch game and stuck with same flow since its only 8 lines

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Overall, I think Eedee had the most effective punches. Not sure who had the most elaborate or anything (though that hashtag one was fucking fire), but Eedee's definitely made laugh the most and they rolled perfectly off the tongue. (I mean fucking "white cheddar cheez-its" LOL like what the fuck, bro )

I think Geno had one of the best moments until he got to the Boston part; the rhyming seemed forced and the shock value was a little stale tbh. But the Colorado part was so fucking crazy. "Faggots too stupid to move" The rhyming was also great in that part.

DGAF, some of your phrasing sounded off to me like 'mocking a sin' and 'cobra striking someone' (though that one I get easier because in rap you can use a rather general action and use it as momentum). I get the entendres and the play on words, but I feel like there wasn't a hard hitting main idea to them. But, still you know how to use them as well as multis and still flow so props on that You have better stuff though.

I like Silver's writing because he's always rhyming the same syllables, but you get a sense of flow from them and it's usually consistent. Like a Cory Gunz verse or RA the Rugged Man. Nothing that notable said though and your phrasing was tad awkward for my taste. But, you kept the momentum for the whole verse though so

There's definitely been some improvement, Ray. In fact, the part that goes;

"blame it on my pencil
But in general beefs essential like weed is to me its special
Ill stab you for no reason with the nearest utensil"

was actually one of my favorite parts, bro. Unfortunately the rest of your verse sounded a bit awkward because not only were your punches not hitting, but the rhyming and phrases sounded pretty lackluster. Still, you're getting better. Drop another audio piece doe.

CP, I actually haven't checked out a lot of your stuff except maybe some of the pieces with Pain. You have a really good grasp on end rhymes and actually the end of your verse is one of the best end rhymes on the piece. Some of your rhyme schemes in the middle don't quite roll off the tongue though (like say Silver's). It may have to do with the alignment Still solid though.

Spyder, did you really freestyle that many multis lol? Your punches aren't as good as when you're writing (some are a bit of a stretch too), but I'm digging the dark themes frequent through out your verse, and you had really good vocab for a freestyle with (including your wordplay ish).

Props to you all. I had fun reading as well as feeding this

[Just Silver]

thanks guy for the feed def wish there was more of these cyphers and more elaborate feed such as yours you really took time and not just to write something for LOF

[Just Silver]

bigray setup another guy lol im itching to write

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed guys, and yeah i find it easy to multi things, its just where i wanna go with the verse.
so when ray showed me everyones verses i was like well... ill go from some serial killers lol

[Just Silver]

Hey guys someone plz setup another this shits cool and obviously will take a few days to submit but worth it

[Just Silver]

Those happen rarely like twice a year

[Just Silver]

lol itd be nice but its probably not gonna happen

[Mr.DGAF]

There's no way man. People drop too much. Just check the last comp we had. Final matchup was mutually cancelled haha.

Anyways, thanks for the feed for everyone that said something about my verse. Trying to step out of my comfort zone so I decided to focus on punches for these bars. Experimenting.

I'll feed everyone else's verse later tonight.

[Just Silver]

Indeed so unofficial drops only count therefore cyphers are the best way to still write

[Just Silver]

colors i could care less about i like writing lol

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I think Geno had one of the best moments until he got to the Boston part; the rhyming seemed forced and the shock value was a little stale tbh. But the Colorado part was so fucking crazy. "Faggots too stupid to move" The rhyming was also great in that part.

Thanks man. I think the Boston shock value might've been stale because 2 other verses mentioned it as well. Nothin' I can really do about that lol.

Glad you liked it.

I think you're right about that because after the Boston lines, I just wasn't moved by the of shock value in the rest of the piece. But even then, your Colorado lines were so dope even without the shock value whereas after that, the rest of your verse really seemed to lose its edge.

[Just Silver]

yea lol the feed is the best part imo