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Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby Just Silver » Nov 9th, '13, 01:50

feed-lyrical lounge by Wreck * cant copy n paste

Whats life but a pile of shit incognito stoppin
People from recognizable ego where we go
Its hell or a cell hello its a felon that sells
Shit that theyd never sell on the shelf
Spiraling with shells through danger to help
Aim at the belt low blows illegal make my rules though
Feeble... life.. it moves slow too slow for my own good
The whole worlds hood at day or night like suge
Stayin alive like beegees itll stick like semen it should
And i know ive been heat like a replayed basket
I stay active most just "madden" shit like Tinactin
Mad tactics bloody and savage as ticks
Savage as Randy you faggots just cant be.. serious
capricious instruments fill the air im spitting with
No rhyme or reason known its rhyme season ya know
Im hunting for flows on a buck you know that you suction cup
Suck n such a whole nut up.. so shut up
Goin an uppercut above the competition combo kickin
till your nonexistent extinct or wish you werent livin
Flippin the birdcage my bird seeds missin shit on a victim
White splotch whiter than the white cop gottem night stickin
Beatem off like Tyson Chicken chokin em and bodies flippin
Cyphers and shit from, myself wrestlin never restin
Rest stop another message of how i can rap at breakfast
To lunch time to punch line dinner with it sometimes
I must admit im just the shit sometimes no sung lines
Only hook is a punch to the eye so you decide
When you wanna ride a beat not my dick bitch
Get beat on the street quicker than police chiefs
De-feat you in steez ahead like a guillotine
You feelin me you numb like Rhianna?
Dumb as Rhianna? comin with the radio callers
Imma rock the stadium tilL its fallen
Like autumn and multi colored
leaves from many brothers who want my CD covers
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby Just Silver » Nov 9th, '13, 21:25

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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby mdemaz » Nov 9th, '13, 23:17

I would love to hear this rapped acapella.

I said before that I find your writing interesting.

I should elaborate.

The way you structure together themes is rather confusing; thus, proving a ironically more appealing factor to the lyrics. It's hard to explain. I think you know what I mean, though.

You just have talent man.

Keep it up.
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby Just Silver » Nov 9th, '13, 23:20

Thanks guy there's alot of stop and go to my flows so it may be hard to understand at first
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby OnurCanRecords » Nov 9th, '13, 23:30

Woah man, it looks good but why do you write so much? I mean, you could divide your text in a couple paragraphs, you know? Maybe it's because of that why I got bored so quickly. Your writing is great and you have an own style, yet I think there's lots to improve about thinking of a subject matter and sticking to it.
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby Boston » Nov 10th, '13, 03:22

Its not bad. I think u should focus on less multi syllable rapping and get more of a message across before you cram all that in there. Good work though, keep it up
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby Just Silver » Nov 10th, '13, 08:20

OnurCanRecords wrote:Woah man, it looks good but why do you write so much? I mean, you could divide your text in a couple paragraphs, you know? Maybe it's because of that why I got bored so quickly. Your writing is great and you have an own style, yet I think there's lots to improve about thinking of a subject matter and sticking to it.

Thanks guy this is apart of my under the influence series it had an actual subject at first then I got screwed up lol

I can easily do subjects but I like writing sporadically so I can be more creative :smoking:

I like messing with flows if u have any suggestions though I am capable :flower:

Never thought about the paragraph style I just keep writing lol
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby Just Silver » Nov 10th, '13, 08:24

Boston wrote:Its not bad. I think u should focus on less multi syllable rapping and get more of a message across before you cram all that in there. Good work though, keep it up

Thanks guy I can do flows too I just love multis im gonna switch next piece with all this new feed
I'm versatile so ill be back :smoking:
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby sneakerheadshady » Nov 10th, '13, 16:54

i like the super complicated schemes in this. its hard to follow at first becuase of some (im guessing) stops, but once the line sclick it makes sense. I also really like the vocabulary you use it makes you lines really sweet. you have seroius writing talent bro :b:
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby Just Silver » Nov 10th, '13, 16:57

sneakerheadshady wrote:i like the super complicated schemes in this. its hard to follow at first becuase of some (im guessing) stops, but once the line sclick it makes sense. I also really like the vocabulary you use it makes you lines really sweet. you have seroius writing talent bro :b:

Thanks guy :smoking: if u still wanna do that one line cypher I'm up for it
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby sneakerheadshady » Nov 10th, '13, 16:58

Just Silver wrote:
sneakerheadshady wrote:i like the super complicated schemes in this. its hard to follow at first becuase of some (im guessing) stops, but once the line sclick it makes sense. I also really like the vocabulary you use it makes you lines really sweet. you have seroius writing talent bro :b:

Thanks guy :smoking: if u still wanna do that one line cypher I'm up for it

i do, im just not sure what i should put in the OP, you know?
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby Just Silver » Nov 10th, '13, 17:03

Just explain the concept and start off the first line and it could just keep going itd be fun
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby sneakerheadshady » Nov 10th, '13, 17:08

Just Silver wrote:Just explain the concept and start off the first line and it could just keep going itd be fun

aight ill do that now. btw feed my lines i posted them in CW haha :b:
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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby Just Silver » Nov 12th, '13, 06:17

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Re: Vodka and a couple Somas

Postby survce » Nov 13th, '13, 02:19

I like the way this guy thinks. The harder the rhymes are to rap, the better chance of talent. Everybody always tells me here on trshady that I use to many multies and that I need better structure.I will be a fan for life :y: :y:
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