Same Hellhole

[shadyblogger]

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Ayyo let me get serious for a minute
Cuz I gotta get some shit off my chest that needs to be let out

I need to be put out because I'm a fucking menace to society
I pose a threat and y'all are gonna finally see
The fucking reason why I be
This way and I'm so demented that I'm more corrupt than a Chinese dynasty
No offense intended I didn't mean to hurt you
Well maybe I did but sure you
Had your faults as well kicking me when I was down
Fucking bitch I shove you around while I wear a whiny frown
Cuz I'm so fucking depressed that I think this is all there is
And if there is some hope than y'all are tripping
Cuz I'm bogged down in the stress
My life feels like a mess and I need some sess I guess
Yes, that sounds like an idea don't it
But still, doing drugs I don't condone it
But when life makes you that desperate it's the only
Way to escape and feel all nice and cozy
Because I'm all alone in this world
No feelings of happiness; no girl
No one to call a lover
No one to call at night when I'm sad like the other
Day when I considered jumping off another
Bridge maybe this time the Brooklyn
Cuz last time the Golden Gate left me looking
Like I was some sad suicidal bitch
Maybe I am; I think I'm too childish
I need to grow up and act my age
At this point I wouldn't care if I contracted AIDS
My life feels like one lackadais-
ical ball of shit
And I'm tired of all of this
Tired of being lonely and having no money
And my stand up ain't working; the audience just says "go home hunny"
Don't know what to do
Don't know what to screw
I'm screwed I guess
That's a good definition for my life:
I'm screwed
Can't even write anymore fucking lyrics
And I even hate this verse; I don't care if y'all hear it
And before you go calling names I think you should all take a look in the mirror
Cuz you're the same as me bitch
Whether white or black
We're living in the same hellhole, I'm just trying to figure out how to fight back

[Just Silver]

A huge improvement guy some nice story telling here

A weird structure but it helps find the flow so not a bad thing
Serious subject but is this real? Just wondering pretty deep stuff

[shadyblogger]

A huge improvement guy some nice story telling here

A weird structure but it helps find the flow so not a bad thing
Serious subject but is this real? Just wondering pretty deep stuff

Thanks bro. The suicidal stuff no. But the feelings I was having kind of. I just was in a bad mood last night and decided to write this but I exaggerated a lot and got really into my sadness I guess. I wanted to try and write something like this.