Old Hurt

[shadyblogger]

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There's some disses going around
And that last one hit pretty hard and made a sound
Hurt feelings
Means more people on the ground kneeling
Begging for forgiveness and for life to be better
Meanwhile some people's problems are an itchy sweater
Some people don't have a sweater and would be grateful if they got one drink of water (pronounced wetter)
For the day without having to rob somebody
And getting your hands all bloody
Because some people aren't as lucky as you
So be grateful and don't whine like a little bitch
What your Dad gave you only requires a little stitch
Some people get their collarbones broken every other week
By their parents or other kids who call them a geek
Just because they wear glasses
One of these days that kid is gonna whip all your bare asses
Because he's more of a man than you'll ever be
And your "manly ways" are suffering from brevity
And to some people; a hug is everything
Because some people don't got parents
And the ones that do; well some aren't caring
Some scream at the top of their larynx
But still claim that they have a happy marriage
It's bullshit
This whole world is bullshit
And everybody is the culprit
So go out there and make a change
Because if you speak up; you could prevent a little kid from having to take the blame
He's tired of taking the blame
He's tired of faking the same
Goddamn smile that he puts on every night to kiss his parents good night
When they don't know he got beat up in a fight
Every other day and hides the lashes with his shirt
And covers the ones on his face with dirt
It's like digging up old hurt
Every time he has to shower and finds the cuts even bleeding worse
And I don't know what else to say; the truth hurts
But think again before you bully that kid into a coma or worse
And think of his sad face as he has to face the nurse
For the third time this week but he tells himself it was only once last Thurs-
day; he sure's in denial as he ignores the blood found in his urine and bile

[IBasicallyRage]

Damn bro. Really Powerful. Loved it

[shadyblogger]

Damn bro. Really Powerful. Loved it

Thanks

[shadyblogger]

This was deep, great message.

Your rhyming and flow structure could use some work but that all comes with practice. If you have any questions, I can try offering some advice. But anyway, the meaning is really nice and very true. Great stuff.

Thanks so much man. Yeah I'll definitely keep at it.

[shadyblogger]

This was deep, great message.

Your rhyming and flow structure could use some work but that all comes with practice. If you have any questions, I can try offering some advice. But anyway, the meaning is really nice and very true. Great stuff.

Yeah, I really like this piece. I didn't know how good Shadyblogger was until I read this. He's definitely got the content down, and although it might seem hypocritical coming from the guy who wrote the diss verse getting all the attention at the moment, I think he's right. Bullying sucks. That was the reason I wrote a diss piece to Silver in the first place because I felt like he attacked my friends, but I sort of fell into it myself and said some unnecessarily mean shit to him.

Hit me up if you ever want to collab on something, guy.

Haha thanks bro. Yeah I didn't even intend this to be about bullying lol. I just wrote the first couple lines and then my mind ran ahead of me and before you knew it I had this verse that was about anti-bullying.

Ok if the opportunity arises, will do.

[Just Silver]

This was good stuff thought itd be more about the recent diss but it was much deeper
I liked the direction I don't know about flow but this piece makes you think

There are people way worse off and no matter what happens it could be worse

Great piece

[shadyblogger]

This was good stuff thought itd be more about the recent diss but it was much deeper
I liked the direction I don't know about flow but this piece makes you think

There are people way worse off and no matter what happens it could be worse

Great piece

Thanks. Yeah I don't know how to really improve my flow/rhymes without the lyrics/message suffering. I could be wrong but at least for beginners it's one or the other. Like I think that the more I try and do some impressive rhymes and flows my content will suffer but the more I try and focus on content and a deep impact, the more my rhymes and flow will suffer. I don't know how to get good at doing both things.

[IBasicallyRage]

Damn bro. Really Powerful. Loved it

Thanks

I feel as though I should drop something now lol

[shadyblogger]

Damn bro. Really Powerful. Loved it

Thanks

I feel as though I should drop something now lol

Yeah I think you should

[Just Silver]

This was good stuff thought itd be more about the recent diss but it was much deeper
I liked the direction I don't know about flow but this piece makes you think

There are people way worse off and no matter what happens it could be worse

Great piece

Thanks. Yeah I don't know how to really improve my flow/rhymes without the lyrics/message suffering. I could be wrong but at least for beginners it's one or the other. Like I think that the more I try and do some impressive rhymes and flows my content will suffer but the more I try and focus on content and a deep impact, the more my rhymes and flow will suffer. I don't know how to get good at doing both things.

Yea it takes time and sometimes you gotta switch flows in a split second
But you'll get better I myself have been staying away from topics so I can have some cool weird rhymes lol

[shadyblogger]

Hey if anybody has any tips as far as keeping up awesome content but also having dope rhymes/flow when you're writing verses, let me know. Because I only seem to be able to do good content with crappy rhymes. So let me know if you have any advice.

[sneakerheadshady]

good piece yo. was the best you've put out so far. the difference between this and big cat is insane. your getting really good man. keep it up!

[shadyblogger]

good piece yo. was the best you've put out so far. the difference between this and big cat is insane. your getting really good man. keep it up!

Haha thanks bro. But I'd like to be able to expand my content. Like lately I've been doing only serious verses that people seem to like. But I'd like to be able to do a really good funny, crazy song.