Eedee & Alieus - Lost Souls

[Eedee]

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Eedee
Alieus

I'm a lost soul, I'm turning to nachos and pot smoke
And fillin' up some random's Tahoe
That's $64 down the drain,
Coulda used that for weed and, feel about the same, but
At the end of the day my vision's green,
It's interesting how I don't care what you think of me.
All my life I've been described as the kind of guy
To shy from life, just the enterprise of listening
To other people's shit is what influenced me
To succumb to this fucking peer pressure...
I keep measuring up to the rule of my green thumb
I see heaven in what I'd do if the weed comes.
See, I'm just a lost soul, and I'm aware,
But really, I'm just as psycho as Michael here

Thanks homie, not sure how but I gotta take control
Cuz what do I got goin', huh? Every fuckin' day is cold
They tell me to eat the frog or just play the role
But I want more, and that makes my anger grow
To lengths that won't stop for anyone, it's untame-able
And once it spawns forth, I'm gunnin' straight for the road
But I path I chose to take is blocked...so pay the toll?
Suck a fuckin' cock whore, I ain't gonna change for those
Sorry ma, ain't gonna be a doctor, I'm settin' sail for major goals
Yet these hardships anchor me down when I'm tryna stay afloat
And grades are under C's, it's not a hard course, that's degrading, so
what am I thankin' God for, punk? This minimum wage is a joke
I mopped floors, I stocked stores but what iced the caking though?
Is now I mod forums and my job's poor, the light is fading slow
So am I a lost soul? Shit, that's a blessing if I could say it's so
Truth is my body's more of a hollow shell, just a vacant home

But lately though, feels like I'm struggling behind bars
It makes me mope and actually wonder if my life's hard
This daily dose of faggotry's fuckin' shit but my scars
Left by the blade to show my trouble's are quite harsh
A misdirected intersection that isn't left by my God
Is in the distance with a message which I've set my eyes on
I'm picturin' a setting in which I'm interested so I trod
Forward with a mission to be remembered as an icon...

But remember when the light's off, we are lost souls,
Tunnel vision is a bitch as we cross upon the cross roads
Heading different directions... I have sought home,
But I'm a fool to believe that my future is not gold.

[SandMan]

Nice guys! Alieus I liked all your inners in your verse, That's one of my favorite parts about this and it seems to make it flow so much better. You guys kept up with the rhyming and composure of this song very well. Eedee nice going I like the emotion you put into it. Cool piece guys. I also like how you guys do features in the CW section !

[gutawafang]

I've seen better from Eedee. Menzo's verse is the better one here.

The best lines come from here:

But lately though, feels like I'm struggling behind bars
It makes me mope and actually wonder if my life's hard
This daily dose of faggotry's fuckin' shit but my scars
Left by the blade to show my trouble's are quite harsh
A misdirected intersection that isn't left by my God
Is in the distance with a message which I've set my eyes on
I'm picturin' a setting in which I'm interested so I trod
Forward with a mission to be remembered as an icon...

But remember when the light's off, we are lost souls,
Tunnel vision is a bitch as we cross upon the cross roads
Heading different directions... I have sought home,
But I'm a fool to believe that my future is not gold.

Nice collab overall because of this portion. 8/10

[Mr.DGAF]

Whew. Noice. Eedee, nice choice of green on the verse color. I like the scheme of the first two bars; I heard a song with the same scheme recently and it reminded me of that. I like the enterprise of listening line and how you went away from that scheme then came back with that bar. Solid stuff. The 64 dollars bar was pretty nice too, damn Tahoe's hogging all the green (ha).

Menzo bring that one post in CW every five month verse. I like it haha. Obviously keeping the scheme going the entire verse was nice, but I was more impressed with the internals that set up the end rhymes. Very well worded too. The first like 8 bars or so had a Eminem 'Lose Yourself' type feel, with the road being blocked and the "sorry ma" part.

The back and forth was dope as well, nice job putting them full bar rhymes in there.

[Eedee]

Your chorus / last verse bit an old chorus I did for someone a long time ago though.

Lol, now that I think of it, Crooked used that same scheme on Pray. Oh well.

[Just Silver]

Good stuff I never knew menzo had a different name lol
Menzo did his thing but I was surprised by Eedee he sorta sounded like me lol
Honestly didn't even know he smoked
Also I liked the simultaneous verse method thing it worked well on this piece

[Eedee]

Good stuff I never knew menzo had a different name lol
Menzo did his thing but I was surprised by Eedee he sorta sounded like me lol
Honestly didn't even know he smoked
Also I liked the simultaneous verse method thing it worked well on this piece

You seriously didn't see all that Weedee shit going around? Lel

[Just Silver]

Good stuff I never knew menzo had a different name lol
Menzo did his thing but I was surprised by Eedee he sorta sounded like me lol
Honestly didn't even know he smoked
Also I liked the simultaneous verse method thing it worked well on this piece

You seriously didn't see all that Weedee shit going around? Lel

I did but I thought it was sarcasm lol

[Eedee]

It is sarcasm. Or is it? Shiiiit.