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Matrix Like Habitat

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Matrix Like Habitat

Postby Rain Matrix » Jul 1st, '07, 05:32

So out of no where this texthead hears a silent beat in tha wind

Dot dot dot dot dot da, Dot dot dot dot dot da

me unplug, my 1 love is some bud, set ta see a legacy of rain
out of control, it's about 2 unfold, I'll neva let up keys must change

into a thought box, I drop off, what's been called a lost cause
I'm not lost, I put candy in yur mouth, and u think pop rocks

oh no, theres a photo, of where I won't go, my final shows flow
I like stages, I fight ta say this, may it, mean tha rains local

partially crazy, I scar skulls please make me, welcome 2 my hell
this is why I'm rain, think about it, this guys well with no dry spell

still these flames of change, burn me like remains of brains on u and next door
watch me gain tha range, and reclaim tha game, so do u want 2 explore
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Re: Matrix Like Habitat

Postby Rae » Jul 1st, '07, 19:57

thats good!

i always like reading your stuff.
b/c u have this certain thing about ur writing.
its hard to explain lol

but yeah its good
keep it up :flower:
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Re: Matrix Like Habitat

Postby J Roc » Jul 1st, '07, 23:08

yea i agree wit rae,ur drops always dope Rain

i likes it this time 2
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Re: Matrix Like Habitat

Postby James R. » Jul 2nd, '07, 15:45

It was decent. Some of the lines were too wordy and overly complex, but it was still decent. The 6th line was a really weak rhyme and that bothered me, but aside from that it was solid.
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Re: Matrix Like Habitat

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 6th, '10, 18:41

some of it seems outta place just slightly but your multis cover up some of the rough edges, still this is a good read :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Matrix Like Habitat

Postby J Roc » Oct 7th, '10, 01:49

3 Years and 4 months ago ............ jesus i wrote like a handicap ^^^^ hahaha
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Re: Matrix Like Habitat

Postby Xray » Oct 7th, '10, 02:00

Kaotic wrote:some of it seems outta place just slightly but your multis cover up some of the rough edges, still this is a good read :y:

Damn son, it took you 3 years and 4 months to feed?

Most pointless bump I've seen yet.
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