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Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

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Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 15th, '10, 02:35

This I promise to all of you, I'll never doubt a lyric,
I promise I'll try to never have a drought in spirit,
I promise to the Lord, I'll pray for your Passion, Christ,
But I also promised to myself, I won't ever ask him twice,
So if I write some dark bars, to get out this funk I'm in,
Screaming next to parked cars, to get my spunk again,
I promise I'll never grow cold in spirit, a soul with frost bite,
If I fall prey to that, I'll know then, I've already lost the fight,
If I don't keep my eyes on my final goal, I've lost my sight,
Not knowing what will save my soul, the cross might,
I promise to you God, I'll never require a steeple for praying,
And I promise to myself, I won't care, what people are saying,
I promise to my evil deeds, its not because of sinner plots,
I promise my bark won't be silenced, because my inner rots,
And I promise if I'm just a loser, I'll always have winner thoughts,
Following my blueprint to success, all the way to the centre dots,

I'll try my best to be more honest,
I'll do my best to not break my promise,
I swear to all of you, to never give up,
Its not fair to all of you, if I give up,

I promise I won't ever need a DJ to follow my heart beat,
I promise I won't need a raingage, when I start to weep,
I promise my quick witted dumb lines, and fun rhymes,
Will never turn into some brick shitted gun crimes,
I solemly swear to never make it my own soul's fault,
That my mind jumps from good and evil, like a pole vault,
I promise even if I erase my sins, I won't have faded face,
I promise I'll never be a first place rapper, who's afraid to race,
Or say to myself, if only I could have stayed the pace,
And I promise to myself, if ever my steady pace slows,
I won't accept, that's just how the race goes, case closed,
I promise I'll never be a closed chapter, in a locked diary,
And my the fire in my soul will help me talk fiery,
I promise to accept the fact, to know I'm meant to shine,
To never walk the straight and narrow, until I've bent the line,
To have a demented mind, until its cemented in time,

I'll try my best to be more honest,
I'll do my best to not break my promise,
I swear to all of you, to never give up,
Its not fair to all of you, if I give up,

I promise that each of my notes, written in chicken scratch,
Won't affect my cold heart, I'll just stick in a match,
I write like that because my fingers brittle, like I lost a mitten,
Charcoal clutched, its hard to hold this crutch, when I'm frost bitten,
You see, really its more like its a light feather I hold,
I sing the parts, of the king of hearts, so I had better fold,
My severed simple soul splits, as if the weathers cold,
I promise to search my soul, to see if I'm hiding doubt,
And never have stress eat me from, the inside out,
I promise I won't lose my temper, when my friends back stab,
No promised I won't bite back, like a fuckin black lab,
And when they do, I promise I won't feel down and worthless,
I promise I won't ever act like a sad clown in a circus,
And if I feel bad, I promise I'll never have to force a smile,
I leap that high fence screamin, never silence the demon,
Of course its wild, for he's the source of my style,
Last edited by Fa-Q on Mar 16th, '10, 01:21, edited 3 times in total.
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Mar 15th, '10, 03:01

If I have to light my house with a thousand lightning bugs,
The windows flicker, so the neighbors know I'm lighting drugs,

Dear lord, that line was ridiculous.

Aside from those 2 unfortunate bars, it was good. It sounds to me like a contract that you were considering signing or something, promising to treat others a certain way.
A Lent promise to God?
Do to others whatever you would like them to do to you. This is the essence of all that is taught in the law and the prophets.
-Matthew 7:12

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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 15th, '10, 03:04

No it was a promise for lint lol...and what were wrong with those lines lol....I added them later cause I thought they fit but now that I look back they don't really lol
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Mar 15th, '10, 03:11

Are you familiar with something called "sense".
Well, that line stopped making it a while back.
Shit, it doesn't even have "sense" in stock anymore.
I'm sure you'd be able to special order some "sense" from a different line.
When does it get shipped?
If it falls flat and breaks, there is no warranty on those lines, so handle them with care.
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 15th, '10, 03:17

Lol I changed it....see if its better
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Mar 15th, '10, 03:21

I'll ___ for your Passion, Christ

Looks like a blank needs filling in.
Even with the mistake, it's far better.
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 15th, '10, 03:24

Goddamn I just keep muckin up that line...fixed for the final time
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Mar 15th, '10, 03:29

It's okay, it averages to a passing grade.
The piece just went from good to great.
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby classthe_king » Mar 15th, '10, 21:48

This is good, it reminds me of something by Bekay. Multis are good for the most part. The flow is pretty good too but make sure your rhymes are the same amount of syllables. It sounds better.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby Just Silver » Mar 15th, '10, 21:57

Real great i mean :o


Loved the chorus

and for some reason the "promise" word itself kept a steady flow

9.6/10
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 15th, '10, 23:14

Thanks Silv and Class
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby BabyBLue91 » Mar 16th, '10, 01:17

I really like the subject you wrote about & for some reason i get drawn to your writing.. hope you get a chance to record this one as well
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby gutawafang » Mar 16th, '10, 07:48

Multis are worth the ejaculation. :worship:

The concept is good man. A promise, cool title. :y: :y: :y:
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 16th, '10, 07:52

Thanks BabyBlue and Fish :wave:
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Re: Fa-Q - A Promise (To All Of You)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Mar 17th, '10, 13:50

Just Silver wrote:Real great i mean :o


Loved the chorus

and for some reason the "promise" word itself kept a steady flow

9.6/10


i agree,, you used the word promise ,, nicely ,,, i enjoyed it alot ,, and i love the chorus man ,,,, it was a good drop ,, not your best ,, but still great ,, keeep doin ya staff,,,,,,,,, :flower: :flower:
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