New Start

[classthe_king]

This is basically me getting back into form cause i haven't wrote much lately. The first two verses were me just getting stuff off my chest that I needed to get off before I could write and I think it worked cause I really liked the third verse. Feed would be great.

Sentus- New Start

I have had a shitty year and a really rough time
She had her heart broken, but she touched mine
Enough lyin, move past looks n' you must find
I'm perfect for you, but you don't see such signs
My love blinds me of what is actually goin on
But my eyes are open now and im holdin strong
I'll go along to avoid fights but it ain't the same
You'd need a million gallons to paint the pain
My brain is drained but I'll fake it n' act so eager
Even though I don't mean it and you won't either
But I know deeper all I want is for you to care
But my optimism gradually morphed to despair
I can't force you to care and I don't any longer
I've grown up a bit, and I've got plenty stronger
You can't fuck with me anymore, im too smart
I'm trying to build myself a new life, a new start

(Chorus)

You've been my best friend ever since age three
With ice cream on your porch, now you hate me
Or do I hate you, come on…this shit ain't true
You were my best friend, and you were great too
Whatever made you fuckin betray me like that
Was so stupid, what do you expect, I'll fight back
If there was one person I thought I'd see through
All the hard times I was sure that it would be you
I would of fought for you, would of lied for you
Would of bled in the head, I would of died for you
I cried for you, but I'm sick of the fakest friends
Always pulling shit, then tryin to make amends
As the days extends I start to see the whole truth
You chose Jessie over me, this shit is old news
I told you I was almost done, now it's time to part
I'm trying to build myself a new life, a new start

(Chorus)

This isn't a sad song about all that I've had wrong
In my life, I already paid the price, it all adds on
Top of each other, if you've got to be smothered
By all the shit, call it quits and stop and recover
Cause it just ain't worth it, nothin remains perfect
It is a big waste of time cause no one deserves it
Since ive done this verse it has cleansed my storm
I've learned to cope as new hope begins to form
I won't pretend to mourn about the losses received
Cause if Taylors all I have then she's all I need
As I fall I bleed, but I stand up and shake it off
I still can so I will man up and take the loss
The mistake has cost so much time and energy
Friendships are hard and I'll never find the centerpiece
If mankind remembers me for these few bars
Then I'm good, and it paid off with this new start

[Fa-Q]

The only thing they lacked was vocab and word play...everything else was on point. Loved the multis even though they weren't extremely complicated, and I loved the rhyme scheme in the first one...way to get back in the swing of things

[Solace]

This was imo a crazy good piece. I loved every part of it. And it was so easy to relate to. The flow was tight as fuck, soo smooth and the rhymes were also great; especially the third verse where you stepped it up a notch. Emotion was evident in all verses.

[Arabian Shady]

Dayymmm homie, this flowed like a ma filer, the transitions and internal rhymes were reeeaaalll smooth. The begining of the third verse was DOPE , cause that internal rhyme thing made it look awesome, the rest was simply top notch
I don't really need wordplay or multies to see what the writer wants to say, and you brotha, did exactly that, message was crystal
as solace said , emotion is evident in all verses
sick shit
Peace!!

[gutawafang]

Seems like a good structure for a good start.

Man, third verse, the best.

Second verse is very simple but it's still very lyrical.

Good one man.

[classthe_king]

Thanks everyone

[X'ed Up]

Great, great structure start to finish. It had great multis not to complicated either but it fit perfectly. The 3rd verse is dope as hell. The flow was smooth and on point.

Overall: DOPE

[classthe_king]

Thanks alot X