Cause & Effect

[Arabian Shady]

Ive been watching alot of documentaries recently, mostly on BBC/CNN and other local channels.One particular documentary caught my attention, it was about finding the reason of all these suicide bombings', They had shown a story where civilian killings had finished allmost an entire family (Ie. most of the family members had died in innocnt shootouts b/w the forces & the terorists) and the economy is dead so they cant earn nuthin. And terrorist were HIRING civilians AS suicide bombers with a promise that they will give their families MONTHLY BENIFITS if they do their dirty work. so what ive written is pretty much about that

It is the cause and effect of whats going on in the Mid. East...
(The italics is the terrorist talkin)


Verse 1
Sunny backdrops a contrast,dark room and no windows
a darkened skin tone,he's got nuthin but three fourths
in flipflops,his lips locked, he weeps with every thought
They sit & watch,listenin,feigning compassion from da start (They're)
"unstoppable,they came in hot,Ak's,grenades and handguns
Impossible to hunt,they left no notes or ransoms,with
Hostile situations, there is no source for income,
i beg of you,lemme do this- its for my mother and son"
"Its a tradegy,whats happened to a part of your family
dont worry my young brotha, we got a job that pays
handsomely,here is, a thousand dollars,but there's sumthin
you gotta do for me,Grab this vest by its collar, the trigger
and just follow me,Seven heavens, our mission is to sit on
them high clouds,while they swirlin all around you,forming
a kinda shroud,do this for your wife and daughter,just make
'em proud, but be sure to scream what we agreed on "LOUD"


Verse 2
As women and children browse, our scene is the local market
Jacket on and he's ready, he's chosing a good target
In the stalls or the corner, the middle or public toilets
"Cross" the middle up,see "X" is- the spot that marks it
No indication of what waitin,lil children run around
They playin,some fightin,pickin fallen fruits up from the ground
The british tourist smiles,while her youngest daughter frowns
she cant understand, what the hell the salesman's talkin bout
He creeps up,like a shadow, as its time for the finale
tries to pacify his conscious,its screamin,his chest is heavy
He's sweating,his shawl cannot conceal,the weight he's carryin
He fights it,he glistens,even the synapses are just ready
"God forgive me, for what i've done, and what i'm 'bout to do
This world cannot understand,the only one who does is you"
circuits charge up,C4 lights up, as the trigga finger moves
"GOD IS GREAT" fills the air,just before the sonic boom


Feedback about your thoughts on topic and contructive criticism would be appreciated.

[SajN]

Maan, that fucking sucked!!!
The lyrics were nothing special, the concept was bad... I didn't like it at all.

















^ Now read that again, and think of the opposite of what I said

[Arabian Shady]

@Coleon : thank you very much for your feedback bro, I appreciate it, I really do, makes me wana write more,lmao!!
Ima drop as much as I can, thanks for peepin

@sajn : dude I allmost fell out my chair man,lol
thanks for the feeed


Come on Peeps!!!

[Fa-Q]

Hahah Sajn...anyway yea piece was great and the concept was interesting...fuck those terrorist, that's the only reason there's proviling against you guys. First verse was my favorit and Jesus I didn't even read this as a song...I read it as if you were telling me a story...bravo ARA-Sha

[randomghost]

not bad at all...while am reading i can describe the scenes...and how sad its...flow was good but not on point...but not bad after all....nice lyrics...good metaphors...keep it up playa...nice one

[Arabian Shady]

@ Fa-Q: thanks alot man, haha i get what you mean by that song thing, i wrote it to a beat, so its kinda like a story.Im just happy you dugg that shit

@Random : haha thanks homie, glad you found it intresting.Thnx for the feedback bro

Keep 'em Coming people!

[Steve Spag]

Damn, now that was some powerfull stuff! 1st verse was dope, but the 2nd one blew it away by miles with the PERFECT rhyme-scheme, sexy flow, and really nice vocab.

I nearly orgasmied at the last line of the 2nd verse. Even after all this time of not posting, you are STILL one of the FEW people that can make me say "WOW"!

Keep it up brotha!

[SajN]

A keystyle I just did lol.

Verse3:

”Another terrorist attack just destroyed a building
30 people are dead, 13 are children
This is the 4th attach within three months
Will there be more blasts, or will they be gone?”
The world is shocked, shaking today
Crying cuz the families were taken away
now anger is filling the air, killing the care
"if the terrorists are not willing to spare
The lives of the innocents and civilians nowhere
then why should only WE be feeling this way
Let’s hate every arab, every paki, every muslim
Throw shit at them, beat ‘em up, no more trusting"
As I hear these words, something in me breaks in two
Cuz no way it’s true, that I support these groups (terrorists)
I feel the sadness and the hatred too, no psyche, it’s true
So let us not split up, I am here to fight with you





It has a flow that I am not sure everyone will grasp.

[Almostlity]

god damn son.. fuckin' amazing piece!!

Steve said it first:

Damn, now that was some powerfull stuff! 1st verse was dope, but the 2nd one blew it away by miles with the PERFECT rhyme-scheme, sexy flow, and really nice vocab.

I nearly orgasmied at the last line of the 2nd verse. Even after all this time of not posting, you are STILL one of the FEW people that can make me say "WOW"!

Keep it up brotha!

[SajN]

What about mine?

[Arabian Shady]

@ Steve: I am indeed humbled to see that you like this drop to SUCH an extent, makes it worth writing on a topic so different, I appreciate your support brother, I really do, thanks for the feed.

@ Almost: thanks alot homie, means alot!!

@sajn: I got the flow easy man, I liked the meaning behind the verse, nice ending
I'm doin something on a similar topic , it will be readdy soon, lol

@ Pink: I'm glad you liked the drop, I also want to thank you fir checking it out, I know you don't really come here alot, thank you for doin so

[GoodGirlsGetGutted]

Sorry man, I can't get into this.
I know what you were going for, but it came off really corny to me. The word choice didn't have enough power, and the narrative style fell flat for the most part. I can't say I was too impressed with the sheer lyrical technique on this one either.
I think you bit off a little more than you can chew with this subject matter. I'm not by any means saying you don't have the ability for it, because I know you do. I'm saying this kind of piece needs to be handled with more care and more time than most others.
You have my respect for tackling such a monumental subject though.

Not s bad little fs, SajN.

[mcZu]

Second verse is better than the first one. First verse seems to lack something in the rhyme scheme, especially in the begining, but after that you picked it up and ran with it smoothly.

Second verse starts off great, usage of vocabulary is OK, usage of words inorder to maintain the depiction of the plot/storyline is done properly. And you ended it pretty strong and vivid.

The only real complaint I've got lies in the begining of the first verse.

But I cannot help myself to feel like you rushed this. You could have done better, but it's not bad.
Keep writing, man, keep writing.

[Solace]

I can't really get the rhyming in this, or the flow at all so I just read it as a story. It was grade A in that sense, and damn the ending of the 2nd verse was crazy, but as a rap I just can't picture it 'cept for some parts that rhymed. It's a great concept, just could've been pulled off a lot better. Though I can't lie, the entire piece was filled with great imagery and it was like a movie playing in my head.

"GOD IS GREAT" fills the air,just before the sonic boom

That sort of reminds me of the ending of Stan, where it's like "Come to think about it, his name was...It was you. Damn.". I can't explain why it reminds me of it, but it has that certain "think it over" effect.

[Arabian Shady]

@GGGG: no worries man, I can understand that, perhaps next time I could do better, it my first drop in allmost 4 months so yea. I got you, you'll definately see improvement in the next drop.Also I seem to be the ONLY one who writes on topics like these,stereotypes/discrimination/violence et cetera. So I will definately that thAT point seriously, thanks for the feed man

@McZu: in general the two verses have been written to a beat, and sometimes it hard to get the structure or flow on the Internet,lmao. Regardless tho Ima tighten mynext shit up as good as possible.

@Solace:lmao @ the Stan part, nah man my verses usually have endings Like that, indeed it was meant to provoke thought, due to the nature if the subject. Ima definately try and make it clearer with my next drop, thanks for the feed bro, appreciate you takin the time

Come on peeps, quit sleepin on me