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[DrunkinDonutz]

Just thought of this in the shower

Spit flow like a psycho
Soon as I enter the lights blow
Gettin' chased by the po-po
Then I turn back and blast em' with my forty fo'
I'm facin' 25 to life
And instead of the chair, they gave me the knife
Clean slit across my throat
I struggled & gasped for as I choked
Now I'm sittin' in Thug'z Mansion, pass me the blunt for another toke
Gimme some of that marijuana smoke.

I don't think it's that good, but please rate. Give me tips & stuff too. Cheers.

[KingDavid]

Well it's a pretty generic rap piece. Rap is best when personal, I find, and try to stay on one subject, but at the same time keep things moving. All of a sudden u went from gettn ur throat slit to smoking weed. sure it sounds awesome but shit that's plausable and outrageous i find is better in rap. Rhyming worked tho , which is #1.

[Fa-Q]

Solomon's father is right