Introducing Myself

[Massacrous]

My first TR verse so I can get known in here....Random as hell.

Hell has now become my hometown
Well After what I did I'm alone now
A Massacrous disaster I dearly left
Yelling voices made me nearly deaf
Mass-murdering at a massive rate
I love women so I gave passive rape
Pissed off when to Earth went back
But I just had to give birth to Rap
After some faggots stomped on her
And I wiped tears from a Comptoner
Recieved a call from Mister Smalls
Saying motherfucker kiss da balls
If your ass is not to save the game
And become a dumb slave of fame
I'm sending Big L to blast yo' ass
And break you like plastic glass
Moments later Pac is at my door
With a shotty yelling on the floor!

[Fa-Q]

This aint bad, its clear you have a good grasp on the concept of multis. Plus your structure is good but you need to make your lines a bit longer. Your doing 8 syl. Lines when you need to do about 12-15 syl. Lines. Weird verses but still cool...keep it up and welcome to TR

[gutawafang]

hahaha. nice.

[Ticalrecords]

agree with FAQ, keep doin tht multi rhymes its workin.

[Massacrous]

Thank you to everyone

And I usually do 20 syl lines and i hate it so i attempted something different. I'll be sure to next time making longer Thanks

[Solace]

20 syllable lines, that's pretty fucking long.

This piece is pretty nice dude...I like the length of the lines, they're fine, good structure used, multies are good...Good way to start off ya CW posting.

[Massacrous]

20 syllable lines, that's pretty fucking long.

This piece is pretty nice dude...I like the length of the lines, they're fine, good structure used, multies are good...Good way to start off ya CW posting.

Much thanks dude. And yes 20 syllable lines are fucking long but sometimes I can't help but 2-3 multis in a line, which is bad at times. So I attempted shorter pieces

Gotta start feeding some people now

[Solace]

When you say that you're making me think of how J Roc writes:

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=83862&p=1128886

For example.

Anyways, maybe you could drop some feed on my piece "I Wish" whenever you catch the chance since the past couple weeks it's been up it's only gotten 2 people to reply on it.

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=83680

[Massacrous]

When you say that you're making me think of how J Roc writes:

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=83862&p=1128886

For example.

Anyways, maybe you could drop some feed on my piece "I Wish" whenever you catch the chance since the past couple weeks it's been up it's only gotten 2 people to reply on it.

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=83680

Will do

[Yah-hah]

Welcome to TR homie. Yeah dude finally another multi cat. Wanna see some more of your shit bro. Check my stuff out lol King of multies

[SajN]

He is not welcome here.