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Gronk Thoughts .... Ft Solace

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Gronk Thoughts .... Ft Solace

Postby J Roc » May 1st, '10, 04:46

SOLACE:
Rest assured that no jest will work, all ya tests is murked,
Slaughter guys with authored lines now the mess is worse,
Steady now, heading down Roccy roads with the hottest shit,
This flow, I apostle it, to show that "dope" is synonymous,
With lil ol' Solace since ,'95, ya hope that you can follow it,
Ya hope should be bottled in, know you can't rock with this,
'Nd I'm back today to lacerate knowing that the mass will hate,
I'd smash these lames if I didn't have a problem battling fakes,
Bash and take their happiness with some little writtens see,
And show them what it's like to be stripped of dignity,
Shoot rhymes to your brains, grown to be widely insane,
Fuck Peace, I'll cut you to pieces, then I hide the remains,
Won't abide to your claims even if I put a knife to ya face,
And if you tell the jury, I'll convince it's a lie that you say,
Should I be nice to you lames? No, I'll fight to the grave,
Consider yourself a sacrifice or else it's ya wife to be slain,
Just remember that your death could be a life that you save,
Open ya head, give a new meaning to "I'd like to get brain",
Tight, just decayed, when dead, still won't lightly be swayed,
You leet faggots can kill yourself with your mighty grenades.


ROC NATION :
My Minds A Bit Slow, i Rhyme With Pitbulls With a 'Hoook' That'll Make U Ride Tha Fish Boats
U Spit Jungle Fever & I Spit Fire Hippo's On Every Blant-Sheet That 'J-See' Like Christ Initials
Bite Ur Lips Closed And Picture A Young J That Likes To Bike & Peddle
That Doesn't Act Like a Cripple And Start To Feel Sorry For himself And Cry A little
I Just Like To Get High a Little , Then Pick Up A Sheet And Write With Pencils
I Wouldn't Even Try To Meddle....
Cuz When 'Roc-Breaking'? It'll Cause-Cave-Ins So u can Mine Some Metal
Then Die a Little Inside .. A Big Hole 'Covered Up' Like Private Strip Shows
Tha Whole Place Ends Up Burning (Coincedence?)i Hope J's With A Person.. Solace With a Turban??
Turns Out Em's Home Page Was Alerted .. There was a 'Leak' And Propaine Was Just Perfect
U Leave-Me-Tha-Blame? Thats an 'Easy-Mistake' Like Mixing Up Cocaine With Detergant
Lets Pay These Pyros Off ... I Know This Ain't Great.. Im Baked And Faced With Writers Block
But Lets Make a Typing Squad ... Roc's-Fate & Solace Aka J And Silent Bob
Text At Me? I Dred Rap Beefs .. Syke, I Want Beef Like Tash Want's Sex Badly
Get Tha Ecs Fast Please ... Far As Change-Flow? 'J-Low' & Only Poppin 'Pez' Candy [?]

Super Light ... BakedAsFuck
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Re: Gronk Thoughts .... Ft Solace

Postby embm » May 1st, '10, 16:28

nice :y:
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Re: Gronk Thoughts .... Ft Solace

Postby Solace » May 10th, '10, 03:45

Thanks.


Anyone else? Honestly?
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Re: Gronk Thoughts .... Ft Solace

Postby classthe_king » May 10th, '10, 04:05

Sorry, I don't know how I missed this

Solace you're rhyming was insane but it was basically all rhyming. You didn't have anything creative in there to make me go damn.

Roc idk what that was. Your flow was horrible and your punches were extremely low for your standards. Step it up next time
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Gronk Thoughts .... Ft Solace

Postby Solace » May 10th, '10, 13:00

:worship: Finally, someone. Thanks for the honesty, and yeah I am aware of it being content-less, I'll admit now it's a pretty bad verse done for rhyme sake. Hopefully I can fix that up in future pieces. :smoking:
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Re: Gronk Thoughts .... Ft Solace

Postby Tash8 » May 11th, '10, 01:09

solace your structure is really really off and because of that ur flow is also really off

ur rhyming is excessive and it has no purpose most of the time..i like ur vocab..just gotta learn to use it better..

j-roc..ur flow was really nice

That Doesn't Act Like a Cripple And Start To Feel Sorry For himself And Cry A little
I Just Like To Get High a Little , Then Pick Up A Sheet And Write With Pencils
I Wouldn't Even Try To Meddle....

i like the flow there

Syke, I Want Beef Like Tash Want's Sex Badly

wtfff...k well i wasn't expecting to get mentioned
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